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Daring Wish |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Daring Wish: The dark demons cloud my view. A god of hell fully renewed. Shimmering sadness runs along. Trickling tear sings her song Of times where love would surely meet The art of arts, the soul complete. Stained ash pages from a book. Pen was taken, inspiration took. The life unlived, the death untold. Withering within a self made mold. Mind is torn, a heart break dish. The simple wrath of a daring wish.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow! I've read it twice..I think I need to read it again. It's great, like ALWAYS. What inspired this? Bel |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Of times where love would surely meet The art of arts, the soul complete." Wow! Powerful thoughts in this piece Javier, great imagery and a lovely flow to your words. Very dark, but nicely composed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, this was such a great one. I would copy my favorite part but the whole thing is excellent. Really good work!< !signature--> "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I'm in awe once again. I think this is one of my faves by you.. you bess neva lose all this talent. ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey guys thanks. Yea i think this poem is pretty ok. Thanks for the replies. "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Rodeo Jones Junior Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 18San Jose, CA, USA |
Ditto to the others, nice poem, I like how it comes back around in the end. "Where is fancy bread, in the heart, or in the head?" |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
wow, tis poem is really good. I wish I could write like that dopey I'm impressed |
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