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Slim
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since 2000-07-19
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Kentucky, USA

0 posted 2000-10-26 10:11 PM


i rarely post my poetry, but enjoy reading the others that have been posted. Though my writing doesnt measure up to many others that have been posted, i hope you enjoy the writing that i do post.


I Want To Be

I want to be with you
to comfort and care for you
I want to be the shoulder you cry upon
the face you smile upon
I want to be the light in your day
the person you struggle through life with day by day
I want to be your everything
because to me you mean everything
I want to be there for you
someone who will listen to you
I want to be yours
now and forever yours

© Copyright 2000 Slim - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-10-26 10:28 PM



  Hey. I think you should really post more stuff!! I liked the repetition of the words, that was great. Well, glad you enjoy this stuff....

  ~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.


TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
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2 posted 2000-10-27 12:02 PM


Great peom you should post your poems more often. Keep up the awsome work I can't wait to read more.
  Lauren

Erin
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3 posted 2000-10-27 01:48 PM


Awww this is so sweet...I really like it so its gonna go in my library!!!Thanks for sharing...And do post more often!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Allysa
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4 posted 2000-10-27 03:35 PM


Slim, hey, i've never seen you around here b4. Your poetry measures up just fine. In fact I think that it's great! What's with your name though??? When I saw the name Slim on the main page, I thought of Eminem, whom I love to death, and I was wondering if there was any connection. (Also, your name isn't Alex, is it???) Anyways, I like this poem a lot and who ever you wrote this for (or didn't write this for) must be really special. Well, please check out my poem, Questions of Faith, b/c I think it rox! Bye> Love ya much,
Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2000-10-27 04:49 PM


Hey this was great, LIke allysa said......it matches up just fine. Anyway we're not matching crap up to anything. People here are just randomly posting whatever the heck they want and seeing what others think about what they are going through. Maybe a little help, comments, and support. I mean......speak and you shall be spoken too said the one armed chinese prophet!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Slim
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 49
Kentucky, USA
6 posted 2000-10-27 05:36 PM


hey all.... thanx for your replys i really apprecitae it!
to Allysa.. nope.. im sorry, im not connected to eminem in ne way, lol.
ERIN: im glad you like this poem and i feel priveleged for it to be added to you library!
to all others: i will post as often as possible, and thanx for all the encouragement!!  

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2000-10-27 06:29 PM


"I want to be with you
to comfort and care for you"

This poem is so full of love and commitment, I like it a lot!  I really like the beginning, it just sets the poem up sp well.  It's a really well done poem, I agree with the others, you should post more   


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

curlygurly
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8 posted 2000-10-27 06:35 PM


WOW I LOVE THIS POEM!!!! I wish i had a guy tell me that! I'm so jealous! It's really good to hear that from a guy cuz it usually doesn't happen to me!  
Curlz


"I feel fine enough I guess
considering everything's a mess"
Barenaked Ladies



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9 posted 2000-10-27 07:09 PM


Aww this is so cute...whoever you wrote this about is lucky to have someone caring about them like you do! Very sweet poem hun..good job!
Slim
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Kentucky, USA
10 posted 2000-10-27 08:27 PM


thanx again to all that replied.. i really appreciate it.
only one thing to curly gurly, im not a guy, lol  

StarPryncess17
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11 posted 2000-10-27 09:08 PM


Please do post more often!   I haven't been around much lately, but usually I am and I do hope to see a lot more from you! Please do not worry about 'measuring up'Your work is unique to you and it is beautiful because it came from your heart. There is nothing to measure up to but the feelings within your heart!! Keep them coming!  

*Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference*


CrazyPrincessAngelDevil
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since 2000-09-16
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Fitchburg, Ma, Usa
12 posted 2000-10-28 12:31 PM


Thats so sweet of you...You should find someone who loves you and wants to be with you. But you shouldn't go looking for love it will come to you..If this poem is about love..~CPAD~  
DancinQueen
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13 posted 2000-10-28 01:45 PM


hey!   I thought this was awesome! I'm like you...i know my poems dont rank up there with the other ones, but its still my work that comes from the heart, and thats what matter   You better keep posting or else   just kiddin!!

<3 always**DQ


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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14 posted 2000-10-28 02:31 PM


This is a wonderful piece! I'm glad you decided to post it. This person is lucky to have someone like you in their lives, even if they don't realize what you feel. I hope to see you posting a lot more!  

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
15 posted 2000-10-28 05:51 PM


I feel the same way.  I like to read other people's poetry.  This was a great poem.  I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it"


Slim
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 49
Kentucky, USA
16 posted 2000-10-29 09:28 PM


i want to thank all for replying once again, and im trying to keep up the posting!  

[This message has been edited by Slim (edited 10-30-2000).]

DreamerGrl27
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Posts 142

17 posted 2000-10-29 10:28 PM


Hey. This was really good...you should submit more of your poems. I really like this part

"I want to be your everything
because to me you mean everything"

Thats so true!!


[This message has been edited by DreamerGrl27 (edited 10-29-2000).]

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