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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-10-25 04:14 PM


Temporarily Dead:


It can never be.
My emotions torn.
A tear drop sea.
Sorrow is born.

Cross road time.
Black blood stream.
Satans gobblet of wine.
Fallen angel wing.

It can never be.
Consume my bread.
The hell I see.
For now I'm dead.





"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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1 posted 2000-10-25 08:21 PM



  Hey. This was great, sent chills up my spine...woooOOOoo...

  ~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.


Isabel Galaxia
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2 posted 2000-10-26 08:52 PM


Oooh, nice.  Is it just me or are a lot of people writing on this subject lately.  Okay so it's probably just me.  Very nice
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3 posted 2000-10-27 05:30 PM


This is kind of saddening (is that how you spell, it???, oh well...) for me to read.  nicely done on it though

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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4 posted 2000-10-28 01:36 PM


for some reason, this line get to me:

"Consume my bread."

Is it used cause bread has always been a symbolism of life?

I like this one too


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2000-10-28 05:40 PM


Well yea it can be viewed as a symbol of life and it's kick butt that you got that. It's also a religious thing doing with Jesus. Know how he gave all this bread to people and so on? Well yea.....that's basically what it means.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lani_DarkOne
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6 posted 2000-10-29 08:18 AM


'Satans gobblet of wine.
Fallen angel wing.'

profound...especially those two lines.

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

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