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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
I've been loyal Since birth: true blue, Too true, too blue - for you, With deer-dog eyes that fit me So well. Trailing along behind, ahead Again for a few, precious moments. I think I'll elope with Death for a while Stolen, sweet moments of wild rebel. I wonder if It'd take a stray in. I wonder if I could ever be loyal To another Master, I hope I can. It's time I make my greatest Mistake. I wish I weren't so faithful. I wish I could have something so great That it could be wanted like Life. Master, I wish. No more chasing prey down, and left Hunting alone, nothing. There is nothing more to let go, to give For me: loyalty. I wonder if Life would miss me, If there would be anything to miss. Always there like the sky, never missed Never known, and it can rain So hard, so much, too little For me to wonder if I could ever be Sky Too, that I wish. Give up, go home: there's no pack to run When you yourself are chased away. I can't leave, I can't stay. Life has its hold over me too great That I wonder if maybe I'm no pet to tame. I thought I ran with a pack, but I'm game. Wolf that I am now, free, wild, running Alone, and I wonder if I'm faithful to that. With deer-dog eyes that fit me so well, I wish to remain faithful. *waves at everyone* Just droppin' by to say hi, so "HEY!" In any case, hope my poem wasn't that bad or confusin'. *sneaks back out again* "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Suteki New Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 5 |
Nice poem! ^_^ It didn't confuse me TOO much. But...if you could explain the concept...like....is this you portraying the thoughts of a dog? Or you portraying thoughts like you've been faithful to your family so long but you're trying to break free of that loyalty? ~S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think this poem was amazing. I saw your name and thought "she must be new" but apparently you're not. I'd much appreciate if you would post here more because i think you have a great talent. I loved this poem....i simply just loved it. The whole concept and format of it was great. I hardly ever think a poem is, in fact, GREAT like this one.....this one is so good. I'm happy to have read it and hope to see more of you around.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. Wow. Umm...yeah what Dopey said. hehe...no, I am not able to speak for myself. well, tootelz and happy writing... ~Carly The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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