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Everything About You |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA 
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Everything I see about you Is filled with beauty Happiness Joy Your elegance fills my heart With butterflies Fluttering around Very free You give me a feeling Nobody else has What is this feeling Could it be? You, I am in love with You are whom I want to be with Princess Will you go out with me. *Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender* |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i know all these feelings, you've conveyed a great message, great poem here, loved the new style jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
That's so sweet!! It's really good. I hope she goes out with you....good luck!  Bel |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This made me smile at the end. Very refreshing poem. Good job!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like the whole peom, but this part stuck out, I like it You give me a feeling Nobody else has What is this feeling Could it be? "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I found this poem really sweet and relaxing...for some reason it put a smile on my face and im all relaxed now. great job I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I really liked this format, and I especially liked the part that Lakewalker pointed out. Keep it up!! ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
So??? did she go out with you??? Tell us, I hope she did. Your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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