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A Candycoated Reality
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A Candycoated Reality |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
-=A Candy-coated Reality=- acting under the influence, she comes talk to me. she makes no sense, i sense this negative vibe. under the influence, thats how they call it. sociological candycoating, just what i needed. she tends to do this, its not unusual. i try to help her, but im just overreacting, overreacting, thats how they call it. psichological candycoating, just what i needed. i need to get her off it, off the habit. its not good for her, its going to kill her. a habit, thats how they call it. physiological candycoating, just what i needed. is it not hard enough, just me trying to help? im going crazy here, i just whant to help. crazy. crazy they call me. no candycoating there afterall im just a guy... San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow! That was....wow. Speechless. Can't think of anything to say....that was great.......geez.. Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Dang boy.....wow good job i am kinda just like in the first reply speechlesss but trust me ive been thru the same thing before tried to help someone thats hurting themselve but instead everyone thinks im crazy. good poem "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Dang boy.....wow good job i am kinda just like in the first reply speechlesss but trust me ive been thru the same thing before tried to help someone thats hurting themselve but instead everyone thinks im crazy. good poem "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
WOW. Psychological candycoating..that's pretty dang creative. I loved this.. keep up the kickin' stuff and stay cool.. ~Carly The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well San this was great as usual. You are fitting right into the passion forums and i know everybody appreciates your work to the fullest as i Do. this is the 5th post, so HAAAAAAAA!!!!!! Anyway the poem was very creative and original. If you'd like to explain this a bit for me then i'd like to know. Who's this GIRL you keep talkin about. Unless this is an old poem, i know who.....but otherwise you got me wondering.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yes Dope, 4 replies means a new poem... and for the record this girl is NOT, i repeat, not the same one as "Impresionism" this is just a friend of mine. She's a workoholic and is always in exess stress, i consider workoholics people who need help, just like this poem could apply to a alcoholic or a drug addict. i think she needs proffesional help, and no this is not a old poem, brand new from last night. =) San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
So what happens if you don't get 4 replies???  I like this poem, it's well done. ...she must not see it as a problem- oh no, that's denial, the first stage! Good job with this one "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
well if i dont get 4 replies then i dont know. maybe ill reply something, dope always replies, plus some other person like you lakewalker could reply so i could get like 3 and id tell myself "close enough" and post a new one... San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Psychological ... Sociological ... Physiological ... Excellent San! I really loved your style and presentation in this ... very nicely composed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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