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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

0 posted 2000-10-21 02:29 PM

Lad's Duality:

Rose-lipt lad praises joy.
Blasphemy surrounds his soul.
Musing over what's and where's.
Shades of pink fade whole.

Vermin craddle springs asound
To all the yes and no's.
Wondering if he was made
Of God's body and Satan's clothes.

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2000-10-21 02:38 PM

Hey Javi. This was so great...you rock..happy writing and stay cool...

~Carly

The people walking in darkness
have seen a great light;
on those living in the land of the shadow of death
a light has dawned.
~Isaiah 9:1-2

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2000-10-21 05:48 PM

Hey man, another great one here. I like the mixture of styles you write in, you're good at all of them.

"Wondering if he was made
Of God's body and Satan's clothes."

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2000-10-22 12:20 PM

Thanks you two......and lake yea i like to try my best at a lot of styles because i'd like, in the future, to have a lot of talent under my belt. Ya know? Writing is going to be my carreer and all, so i should get the basics of a few styles of my own and a lot of already known styles. I really don't know much of poetry THEORY....i just wing it and see what comes about. Soon enough i'll learn about the do's and do not's......but right now i'm just a kid expressing.

Glad you liked!

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

4 posted 2000-10-22 08:27 PM

good word usage, it creates a sense of style, and i have to admit the last two lines are very creative, awesome!

jeremy r

"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~

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