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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

0 posted 2000-10-18 08:50 PM

NOTE: This is a style i like to write in lately. You will see a LOT of poems with this style in The 6th Round.

Undying Love:

Blackened eyes of worry years.
Skipping faith of now.
Silver sheets with rising fears.
Dead crops I seem to plow.

Curious stench with moral down.
Dirty sneaker strays.
Rabbits foot in double frown.
In living, loving stays.

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2000-10-18 08:54 PM

Hey there Javi. As always, a wonderful piece. I loved the sneaker part...I like this format too. Well, happy writing...

I'm nobody, who are you?
Are you nobody too?
Then theres a pair of us-dont tell!
They'd banish us, you know...

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

2 posted 2000-10-18 08:55 PM

This is good....when did you write this? That always confuses me....don't quite know why. Okay well keep it up chico....hasta luego
Bel

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2000-10-18 09:10 PM

Haha isabel has a doubt that maybe a lot of you have cuz i kept you up to date in WHEN i wrote this. OK......for all of you:

From now on....ALL the poems you will be seeing as RECENT. These are a part of the 6th Round.......my latest group of pieces that im currently working on. So these are the now of now's.......hope you enjoy from here on out.

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-10-19 03:45 PM

I thought this poem was very good. The style is good so I won't mind seeing it a lot

I really like the beginning of it.
"Blackened eyes of worry years.
Skipping faith of now."
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"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

5 posted 2000-10-19 10:21 PM

CUUUUUUTE! Me likes me likes!!
ME GUSTA!!!!!!! *L*
ok I am done now

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

6 posted 2000-10-19 10:48 PM

*jumps up and down and claps her hands* htisd is so ORIGINAL!! i love it

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2000-10-24 06:05 PM

BRAVO!!!

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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