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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Uhh. This is horrible. I don't even know what I was trying to say... lol Vreni Fantasy See fairies dance between my teardrops, leap and twirl In imagination’s perception the colors run, begin to swirl. Traveling down a terrifying slide, a dizzy spiral descent, I fly by stills of my life, view sins I’ve yet to repent. Surreal dreams of clowns, white rabbits, pixie magic Curtain lost hope, new pain, a life so dismally tragic. Behind the faceted mirrors, through the hazy smoke, Lies a superficial soul, in self-pitied sarcasm soaked. Soon I reach the end of this declining helical trip, And step off Fate’s Wild Ride, more accurately, slip. Find myself staring at a world of whimsical delights A fantastical little planet, my own land of no wrong, no right. Now the Book of Knowledge hovers, open, before me, But as I search for the Meaning, only blank pages do I see. I journey on to find The gnome, He who Clearly Sees All, Attempt to purloin his Clarity, but, too late, I hellbound fall. I land upon a nettle blanket, in a Forest, enchanted Pure As I run from darkened despair, towards a greater Cure. Fleeing, I reach a castle gate, inside the Secret does lie, Held within the petals of a Rose, poised to soon die. This absurdity, insanity of this land so foreign, strange Penetrates my ideals, my conscience, forces a change. I continue to ponder, confused, and let loose a scream, Wake up, drenched in sweat, twas only a dream. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Holy mother of God this was amazing. I loved the flow and the wording and everything and everythign and everythign and did i mention everything? This rocked my world completely. I love the style, i love the beginning-ending-and all in between. Great job. I truly appreciated this piece of work and i hope to see a lot of more your work. Once again and congradulate you on this because i fully do appreciate this to an extent that you couldn't know. This style reminds me of my way of writing in the past and i just think it hits the spot. Great job!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Well I guess Dopey loved it! I do to, it's full of meaning and written well  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ditto to everything they said!!! lol. Happy writing!! ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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