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V.I.P. (I'm really proud of this one)
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V.I.P. (I'm really proud of this one) |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Well...yeah this is a little darker than I like any of my poems to be but hey, can't help what comes out of my mind I guess. *shrug* Hope you like it anyway. Make way for the V.I.P.'s, let them all get through Roll yourself out and let them walk all over you. Mind the thorns on the ground They'll only make it hurt more. Hold back your cries, better you than the ones we all adore. Here come the beautiful ones, now bow down nice and low. It's their time for glory yours was 15 minutes ago. Kneel down now, be careful not to scrape your knees In reverence and silence now behold your V.I.P.'s Honor them and cherish them treat them all like Kings What'd they do to deserve it? Not a solitary thing. But deservence doesn't matter Immorality is their key And for a lifetime they'll be more than you and I will ever be So stand up, show them some respect, real loud now cheer Welcome to the real world You're going to be very unhappy here. < !signature--> ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~ [This message has been edited by Kandi (edited 10-16-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Well I can see why you would be proud of this!! It is terrible the way people let others walk all over them like this...everyone is special...I really get annoyed by people who think themselves on a higher level than others. Well, keep up the great work and hapy writing... ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! Now that packed a whallop Kandi! Powerful words here, and great wisdom in your closing ... those who feel other's need to bow down to them do have to reach reality sooner or later ... well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I am new here but I am being really impressed with the quality of poems that are here. You're poem is really good. It sums up everything that this world is about. Great Poem Keoni |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job in writing this poem. A much appreciated read. A lot of thought was behind this one and i loved it immensely. Great job and i hope to see more!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Life is unfair for no reason and you do a good job of expressing that. thanks for sharing it. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN" ~Hatebreed~ "I am, who I am and what you think, I don't give a damn" Chilli Peppers |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I love the attitude behind this, it's nicely done "Roll yourself out and let them walk all over you." "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
this poem was really cool, the class struggle here is intense. I like it, it's a good way to say that they're not so special |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Kandi~ This was amazing!!!You have brought so much to my mind but honestly I dont know what to say first...The people that want us to bow down to them in my opinion are just insecure...They need everyone else to know who they are just to be happy...They live a life that they dont want to live but do just to be able to walk all over people...But thats just my opinion... You brought up an intresting topic...Thanks for sharing it... 2 thumbs up for you!!!  ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
and proud you should be girl!! You've done an excellent job with this one. Your words conveyed your feelings excellently and the imagery was perfect. Thanks for sharing this one!! Love always~*~Jess~*~ p.s.~e-mail me, I've got a lot of stuff to yell you! But I lost your e-mail add...hope to hear from ya soon. *Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
This is really great! *Speechless*........okay well keep it up aye? Bel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I can't believe what i just read!!! I'm so sorry if this is how you feel the world to be. But why accept it when we know that it's wrong, why not fight it? It's all these stereo-typing in this God forsaken world that causes pain on others. Be proud of yourself. You said it yourself, that they have not done anything to deserve it, so it shouldn't be given. They are not half the person who's done something worthwhile and has made a difference in this world. That is what you should strive for. They might be popular now, but in a couple years some of em might loose their hair, get fat, etc.... They will be forgotten. But if you do something that makes this world better, you wont. And that's what should matter to you. Don't give up on life.....smile I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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the dark angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 37 |
Well done Excellent writing. Keep it up (your head too) Love and Blessed Be Laura Lee -x- |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This rocked my world! It was written well and it's TRUE. Nice work |
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