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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Wait 'til the sun goes down And for the tides to depart To the backdrop of lovely night Then it's time to grow apart Suddenly moon reveals it's face And then the rocks tumble near Bringing distance closer from us Soon the clouds crumble to air Glitter covers stars in dazzle Ocean water shines in charm Leaves a twinkle on your face These vibrant lights mean no harm The warmth of sand makes us one Your love's vibrations tremble me Aura of mystery creeps over us Rejecting a sense of melancholy Skies above make our senses keen From now on and forever more Before we leave I wish to convey I've never felt so special before I guess what Im trying to say is that there is nothing better in the world than the beauty of skies and stars at night with that special someone. "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I Got a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I love the imagery in this one, the poem is well done! The end of this really conveys your message well "Before we leave I wish to convey I've never felt so special before" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there. This was so sweet... terrific word choices...happy writing... ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow jeremy....this was wonderful. i'm telling ya...you've got a thing for this. keep writing and it'll get better everyday. salma |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job buddy, i agree with the others on this one.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jeremy~ Good one!!!The picture you painted for us is fantastic!!!Keep it up my friend... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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