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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2000-10-14 09:42 PM

Hi everyone well Im not big with love poems but I want to write this to my b/f. I love him very much.tell me what u think because i dont often write love poems
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His hands gently taking
every plane,valley of
my face
staring deeply in my eyes.
emerald fire stirring in his
eyes I feel a fierce tremble
in his chest
standing so close feeling the
beats of each other's hearts
seeing the pulse at the base
of his tanned throat.
My breath becomes stuck
in my throat as I he pulls
me closer, his hands settle
on my lower back, my arms
curl around his neck, I feel
the soft touch of his lips
against mine, electrical
currents flow through my veins
His hands gently drop from my face
back to my back and wrap my arms around him
with my neck resting on his
chest the rise and fall
of his chest tells me
that i have finally fallen
in love with someone, who
wont hurt me.
"I love u." I whisper
and I get a whisper back
that is the sweetest words...

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2000-10-14 09:52 PM

Gurl this poem was soooo good!! I was hooked reading it, it sent out such a loving vibe, each line i read proved more and more how passionatly you love him. Great poem!!!

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2000-10-15 12:02 PM

I thought this was really good, it has a great feeling in it. Tell us what he says when you share it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

cutie2005
Member

since 2000-04-30

Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA

3 posted 2000-10-15 12:29 PM

Do you think it's good? thats all that matters. But for my opinon I thought it was great! You showed what you felt so easly... I think it's wonderful!!!

Luv ya,
cutie

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2000-10-15 01:16 PM

Hey im glad you decided to post up some poems. Especially a love poem which is not your usual. I'm happy to see it here and i thought it was the most sweetest thing. great job!

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

5 posted 2000-10-17 10:03 PM

thanks for your comments. but unfortunatly and with great shame i have to say that he is no longer my b/f and he feels this poem is embarassing to him. Because if u read the poem "im sorry", then u would undertsand y.
thanks again
sincerly
~Ina~

"There is no money,there is no possesions, only obbessions, take my money, take my money..I dont need that S***T.."
~Papa Roach Between insects and a

luvnkris
Member

since 2000-08-31

Posts 144
Perth, Australia

6 posted 2000-10-18 09:46 AM

awwwh that is so shweeet! and written so well.
i could imagine it as i read it! hell goood!

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