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Another Poem I Posted in a Different Forum |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Footprints in the sand... Why do I see four instead of two? Alone, left with the irony of life Faith wounded and scarred What am I to do? Troubles and Tribulations? Life's meaning is lost in dreams Begging for answers and miracles Wanting her back A fool, I am, it seems Shown the way back This is not an option to take Please listen to my prayers I'll love her forever Help me before it's too late Footprints in the sand... Still, I see four Exhausted, lost, and confused Keep searching no matter what Wanna be with her forever more Footprints in the sand...? |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Acire~ I dont think I ever responded to this one but I did read it...And you know what???I loved it...Cause I love the footprints story...Beautiful but sad my friend... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Really good writing acire. I don't know what to say, it's awesome. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ok i thought this poem rocked, but im wondering what you put a one verse at the end saying "footprins in the sand.....?"..... what's that all about. It freaking intrigues me to the fullest. I know it has meaning but i cant quite pin point it. TELL ME!!!!!!!!! hehe  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
thanks all for replying. you are so kind Dopey --- I'm glad someone realized that part. Yes it has it's own meaning to it. That's why it also has that question mark in the end of it. I am assuming that you know the story "footprints in the sand", as a lot of people do. My ending has a simple meaning to it to tell you the truth. All it's saying at that time i wrote it, is that i'm doubting really the point of that story. I felt at that time that i was in big trouble, one of the worst in my life if i may add, and i didn't feel like he was actually helping me thru it at all. It doesn't mean that i stopped beliving in Him. That is also the reason why I say four. It's because I believe that He is there, but He was beside me all the time and i didn't need Him that way, i neede Him to carry me thru. I was basically crying to Him to pick me up. I was in that bad of a shape at that time. Hope this helps explain it  thanks for asking I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
wow. wow. wow. this poem really relates to me. wow. wow. wow. How's life??? Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey now its my turn to do some bumping..footprints in the sand..hmm i really liked this one. the part about seein 4 footprints instead of 4 keeps sticking in my mind. lovely..keep up the great work<3 Kiley "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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