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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2000-10-13 02:35 PM


Do you dare
Tread into uncharted territories
And are you truly up to solving a mystery?
Then come, join me
Enter my soul
Figure out all the things that truly make me whole
And realize that once in
There is no turning back
Be careful and not to burn my heart
With any of your candle wax
And if your candle should ever blow out
Close your eyes, and follow the echoing sounds
Don't worry you won't fall
You won't get lost, you'll always be on solid ground
But you might be wondering
How is it that you will find what you seek
You'll just know
Just listen for it to come to you
Hear my soul speak
But do not use your ears
It's much more complicated than that
I want you to use your heart
Then I will surely know
That you are truly blessed
And worth of my undying affection
And my utmost attention
I don't ask for much
To prove yourself worthy
All I ask is that you are true
True to your heart and true to yourself
And true to me
And possess the ability to listen
With your heart, spirit, soul and mind
And always be able to seek what you find
For if you only listen with your ears
You are unable to reach the things you hold so near
And unable to listen when I need you to hear...


"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

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1 posted 2000-10-13 03:04 PM



  Hey there. I really, really loved this. It flowed so well from line to line and was an overall great piece. If you need to crash and crash and burn, you're not alone...

     ~Carly

"I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper.

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-10-13 04:01 PM


This is very well written.  It's very deep thoughts about who you'll let in.  I like it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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3 posted 2000-10-13 06:01 PM


hey great job, i like the idea and concept of this whole thing. Great job as usual!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-10-14 09:47 AM


What an excellent theme Ceinwyn! I love the way you've captured your thoughts in this piece ... and wonderful opening lines!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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