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peanogrl83
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since 1999-12-04

Posts 202

0 posted 2000-10-12 05:43 PM

Mmmm...I really can't stand this poem, it's a little dark and depressing even for me. lol But I'll post it anyways....
Vreni

Death

Life, an endlessly coiling, spiraling void
Leaves one’s soul empty, emotionally devoid.
Could it be, that living is just a way to prepare
For the ensuing, required, death and despair?
That existence has no meaning, even less worth
For our demise is fixed from the start, from our birth.
Unnoticed is your generosity, your virtuous deeds
Thanatos visits anyway, to these he pays no heed.
There is no point in trying, none remember that you do
Your name will leave no mark, as you bid adieu
You can’t escape the horror, no matter where you run
What you’ve built with care, will crumble, undone.
Your fortune, love, all your emotions and thoughts
Mean nothing after a funeral, as you lay in your plot.
Awaking too late from your naiveté you begin to cry,
Your one purpose on this earth is not to live, but to die.

Morouxshi San
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since 2000-10-11

Posts 207
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2000-10-12 09:41 PM

i like it.
specially since ive written bout this.
normally i just say i was listening to the NiN when i was writting and that calms me down...

San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2000-10-12 10:10 PM

I think a lot of what you wrote...was unfortunately true. I wish i felt differently and couls say with certainty that life is totally worth while, but i cant. Great poem...it really expressed how you view this subject

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-10-13 03:15 PM

This is kind of dark. I don't like it when people have these kind of thoughts because it makes me think of them

But this is a very well done poem. The end is so, I don't know, moving for me, it's stirring in my head. It's a creepy thought. Wow, ok, I'll just stop typing now

"Your one purpose on this earth is not to live, but to die."
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"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2000-10-13 03:21 PM

This is a wonderfully written poem. I love the flow to this piece, but I can't say that I agree with everything in it. Yes, there are many things that are pointless after death, but kindness, love, and virtues are not among them. I think that these are the few things that you can leave behind that will preserve your memory. Great writing, though. We all have our dark moments.

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.

Caz
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since 2000-09-13

Posts 133
Concepción, Chile

5 posted 2000-10-14 11:24 AM

I agree with you peanogrl83

It's been raining since you left me.

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