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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Ugh! Those of you who post in this forum - to be as talented as you all are is a gift! Now, if only I could find somebody to give me that gift... lol haha Vreni Myself Solace now, as the rage in me subsides, Towards greater power that which me divides. There are no tears for those who cannot cry, No comfort from fears that refuse to die. Perfectionist I am, I curse the powers that be Sardonically laughing, for making an imperfect me. Life holds no love for those who can only hate, Soon despair’s dictation I shall Inaugurate. In a sea of moving people, I am solitarily alone Self-loathing of such strength I dare not intone. I avert my gaze as I pass the cold windowpane, My shiny reflection reminds of what I disdain. An Impotent mind controls a flimsier being Acknowledges, continues, without truly seeing. Viewing the world as if it were all but dreams, My conscience numbs, aware that it is as it seems. Half-open eyelids close to truth, finally asleep, I only awake in nightmares, for there my soul can weep. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Perfectionist I am, I curse the powers that be Sardonically laughing, for making an imperfect me." Great expression in this poem, and wonderful use of language! It's so difficult when we expect "too much" of ourselves. I've been there also, and it took many years to realize that I couldn't expect perfection ... only then, did I learn to enjoy my life a little more. Nicely penned!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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LoveAll Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148B'dale, USA |
You are an awesome poet hun! I'm a perfectionist myself, and I know it can really stink. Just always remember that you are wonderful (and always loved) in Jesus's eyes, not matter what happens. And it always helps me to know that you can't control other people's actions or their feelings towards you. You have an amazing amount of wisdom in this poem...and I LOVE IT! God Bless and Keep Smiling Those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles; run and not grow weary, walk and not be faint. Isaiah 40:3 |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
This poem is awesome! I really liked the whole 'windowpane' bit. Good job, chick! *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was great!! I dont know why you say that you dont have a gift because from this poem it seems that you do... a very big one. Im happy for you and hope to see more of your work.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You are talented as well. You only have to quit denying it to realize how true it is. This poem is really well done. I really like this part: "There are no tears for those who cannot cry, No comfort from fears that refuse to die." "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Kit - that's quite the compliment, coming from a wonderful poet such as yourself! Thanks! LoveAll - yes, perfectionism is both my bane and my strength. Thanks for replying! Lyric - thanks for the compliments! Dopey and Lakewalker - Ohhhh bother, you two flatter me WAY too much. I'm nothing grand, in comparison to others here, rather bland. :.) Thanks for replying, though! Vreni |
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