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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: Written very negatively, don't worry....im not going to kill myself haha....not yet at least Mwhahaa!!!!! Wrinkling Wish: I wish apple pie was free. I wish I were truly me. I wish my dentures wouldn't fall out. I wish my life were not worn out. I see the light and feel the pain. I keep the sorrow and the shame. I give my time and wither away. I wish that I would die today.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Great poem man, really negative, but that's not why I'm replying. I just wanted to say that be careful with what you say and what you think. It worried me when you said "I wish that I would die today". Hard words man, I used to think that way, and I also kept saying that it couldn't happen to me, how was I supposed to kill myself. Later I knew that nothing is away from us, so be careful. Ok, great poem man, maybe it might seem that I'm saying weird things, but I just had to say it. Bye, your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
don't go committing anything now one me...heh well it was negative but great nonetheless...and to take this moment to point out i write a lot about death and suicide but no one get's scared in their TYPING for me...lol...i'm not loved man...nurture me..heh lets toast to this great poem and say some words..."Death to SAP" I can only see through your eyes This is how i die |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Well Dopey I didnt find this that negative...I mean not all poems are personal...But nice one!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is a good poem, here's the part I like the most: "I see the light and feel the pain. I keep the sorrow and the shame." "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Monica Ash Junior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 17 |
That was a good poem sometimes I feel like that but hey check out my two new poems Loving Willy and Remembering the night we ment and tell me what you think please!!!! Monica |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
great poem dopey! ok anyway...... thanks people......this was kind negative but do know that i will not die any time soon *dies*................ "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Ah, another one of your controversial poems....... you troublemaker! Peace out, yo. *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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