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Death the only pain we can't feel
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Death the only pain we can't feel |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Death The only pain Death the only pain we can't feel Telling oursleves we won't ever die, wishing we could convince oursleves that. Those of us which want to die whisper words of death upon the a paper for the ones we plan to hurt, wishing that we could be swallowed by the blackest depths of earth. Telling how we feel to those who won;t understand our feelings Turning to those who say they love us but really don't Hurting them, with the pain we can't feel Suddenly death becomes and we sink away from the world we hate so much. ~Ina~ |
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Monica Ash Junior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 17 |
that was a good poem. Keep up the work hope to see more!!!!! |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
Very powerful & well depicted! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions!  This is a very dark piece with which to introduce yourself with. Is dark poetry the genre you generally write in?Please check your e-mail for a special welcome. When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome: These thoughts are very well written, I like the poem a lot. Please keep posting [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 10-09-2000).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
First of all, I would like to welcome you to passions!!! Truly an amazing first post. Thoughts which were obviously thought of. I commend you for your a great write "Telling how we feel to those who won't understand our feelings Turning to those who say they love us but really don't Hurting them, with the pain we can't feel Suddenly death becomes and we sink away from the world we hate so much." Loving your words  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Welcome to passions!! Terrific piece of work you got here. Keep it up!! ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh hey well the poem was nice, a few words were kinda used wrongly i think. But it was good altogether. Welcome to passions and i hope you liked it here! hope to see more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
a very good first post indeed..and welcome...well i don't see death as pain really..more as escaping pain in a way if you can follow me...ok i'll be quiet I can only see through your eyes This is how i die |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Welcome to Passions! This is a great dark piece, I really enjoyed it. Hope to see a lot more from you! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
HEY This was awesome. Death the only pain we can't feel.....so true it sends a chill up my spine. great usage of words and i like how you put it together and put your thoughts directly onto the paper. wonderful! keep up the great work~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was great! Very well written! Nice work, keep writing! ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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