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Alwye
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In the space between moments

0 posted 2000-10-07 11:24 PM


Hey there everyone, I haven't posted in here in a while, so here I am!  This is one of my older ones, but I thought I'd share.  

A sojourn to a sylvan stretch
I take in breath of dreams
Where nimble winds fall through the threads
Of reality’s silver seams.

Vapor blows in lacy veils
Through the still of clearing thought
And wafting through the monarch’s lair
I reach for wings ne’er caught.

The path of softness I retread
Among blooms of quiet peach
Watching as rich swells of earth
Tumble to a crystal beach.

Hawthorn grows among the wood
Tranquil petals chanting
As darkness painted ‘pon my eyes
Slowly begins recanting.

Reincarnated by the gentle lull
Of gently slumbering green
The twilight vivid within my soul
Is for the moment...unseen.





*Krista Knutson*

"Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious

© Copyright 2000 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
anomaly187
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1 posted 2000-10-07 11:51 PM


your words are so...i can't even think of a word...this was just so beautiful..this is just amazing....i could on and on but i can't think of any words to say anymore...you are really talented...my closing statement

HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
the clowns on parade
the clowns mascerade
rip off your face
rip off your brain
the clowns on parade
-me

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-10-08 07:40 AM


Incredibly beautiful Krista, so rich with vivid imagery ... your wording and cadence is superb. It is a joy to read you, as always!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-10-08 12:18 PM


Yes, full of imagery, well written!  This one is awesome
Erin
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4 posted 2000-10-08 02:26 PM


Alwye~
This is just amazing...I like it alot...Even if it is an older poem...I give you 2 thumbs up...Thanks for sharing it!!!


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2000-10-08 02:54 PM


This poem was simply amazing. I loved it. I don't know if i'll ever be able to write like you, i hope i do though.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Alwye
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In the space between moments
6 posted 2000-10-08 08:28 PM


I thank you all so much, I am really glad you liked it!  

*Krista Knutson*

"Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious

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7 posted 2000-10-09 08:41 PM


WOW!!! This should be published...WOW!!!



I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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