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Depart From Me!
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Depart From Me! |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Here's a not so little poem i wrote a few minutes ago. Just one of those that flowed word for word from my head to my fingers. There have been no edits so do'nt worry about wording and grammar. Just read what i have to say, i think many can relate somewhat. I give you....... I hate that i wasted so much on you when there's so many more who care about me and how i feel and each day they ask me how it's been and i know they care from the tone in their voice as they speak of days gone by and times past through like the ones we went through that you no longer remember or care to share in reflection instead hide them inside and act like i never was a part of your life and your dreams you lived with every day and night you try to forget everything you know just as I couldn't wash you from my thoughts with the self righteous acts and insanity i let prevail in my life as a deterant from the inevitable realization that you cared not for me nor my life but your own selfish reguard and infamous carelessness you display to your family and friends when we see you lie to everyone including yourself does not know what you are doing behind that clouded sick head that you have developed a blind sickness and refuse to see reality which makes you less of a person and a horrible display for your children to come in the future you will still disreguard truth as an asset and will stumble over and over again because you refuse to open your ever blind eyes to the truth will set you free if you let go and allow Him to work in you and quit refusing help and shut your mouth and open your mind to see that you have errored and have become as the thing I hate that you have become what you are the appitomy of all that is dispised and all that is good to be with as the fire went out and i saw the deadness set in when i knew that you had fallen and would not let another pick you up from the thorns you are in and i will not reach my hand to help you up from there, not now and not in the days to come when all has passed away and you again speek of how it was back then I will stare at you in disreguard to your words and care not what you say nor will i ever again tolerate your lies so i refuse you thus i refuse to put from me the best i am! There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Darque Poet New Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 5 |
Excellent poem. Haven't seen you in a while. Come join us @ Poetry in the System! E-mail me for details. Thomas |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, poured right of your head! This is good, yes, long, but good. Very well done hoppy!!  |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Glad to see so many people enjoyed this one! There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I can't wait to see what you could write when you take your time. this is really good I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
take my time *L* it might help but 99.9% of the things i write come strait from my head to my fingers and i never edit it. I think it takes away from the quality of a writing if it's revised too much. Though, never know There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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