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Fearless_Angel
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Calgary, AB Canada

0 posted 2000-10-05 09:20 PM


Nightfall

The tide comes in, the waves go out.
My soul drifts away into the ocean.
The pain fades off like the light and the day,
Leaving me in the black and hollow darkness.

The scar is deep and will not heal,
The voices never stop, they mock me.
Tell me what to do, I don't need them.
Leave me alone!

A web of fear entangles my mind,
Overpowering my will to go on.
With one last sigh, I let myself go,
Allowing my last hope to slide away.

The fall is slow and the wind rushes by,
I close my eyes but do not cry.
The last thing that comes to my mind,
Screaming, crying, I hear my name in the distance.

To give up hope is to die away.
Leaving others in despair.
To feel my sorrow, to feel my pain.
Maybe now, they will understand,
The choices that I made.



[This message has been edited by Fearless_Angel (edited 10-06-2000).]

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darkstar
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
1 posted 2000-10-05 09:57 PM


Wow...awesome poem...I feel like that a lot of the time...not a good feeling...I hope you start feeling happy.

Dark Star

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2 posted 2000-10-06 10:04 AM


Oh wow!!! I think you deserve a standing ovation on this one. This is really good.  One thing though, do not give up in life.  Keep fighting every bump that comes in your life.  I know it's not easy, but nothing in life comes easy, nothing in life is guaranteed.  keep up the good work. keep ya head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-10-06 07:05 PM


acire hit the advice right on the head.  Great poem here Fearless_Angel.  I really like it.
Child of the Stars
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4 posted 2000-10-06 09:00 PM



  Wow. Terrific job....wow...wow wow...

     ~Carly

Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line.
I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine...

Caz
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since 2000-09-13
Posts 133
ConcepciĆ³n, Chile
5 posted 2000-10-06 11:33 PM


"The scar is deep and will not heal"
It's true, but you've got a friend here that will help you out. Don't give up faith, and most important, don't lose your mind. If you need a friend, you know my ICQ# and my email is mad_bones@hotmail.com. Just give me a message and I'll try to make you feel better.
Well, maybe it's useless to say that the poem is great, 'cause everybody already said it. But anyway, the poem is really excellent. Bye, and message me.
Your friend, Caz

It's been raining since you left me.

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
6 posted 2000-10-06 11:41 PM


a big double W with a O in the middle (wow)
thats all it needs.

"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
7 posted 2000-10-07 05:25 PM


A beautiful poem! Hope things start to look up. I agree with Acire, that's great advice! Keep your head up!!  
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~

Acire~take your own advice kid!!  


~*~Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference...~*~



Fearless_Angel
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 57
Calgary, AB Canada
8 posted 2000-10-09 10:32 PM


Hey Everyone:
    Thanks for all your advice and warm compliments. Yeah, I think this is one of my best! It really is the truth and I really tried so hard to let everything out that time! Anyways, I don't know where I'd be without your help so Thank Q for everything! And I wanna learn a lot more of your guys work ok? Thanks again!
                        Love,
                           Angel

Dopey Dope
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9 posted 2000-10-10 02:49 PM


Let's all be happy people! You know what is scientifically proven to give happiness? Eat rotten papaya and run for miles until you vomit....that oughta REALLY suck and by then, you'd be happy you stopped eating rotten papaya and running for miles....how about it eh?
...ok well yea, keep your head up!!! Good poem!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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