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branden726
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0 posted 2000-10-05 04:17 PM


A kiss is just a kiss untill you find the one you love,
A hug is just a hug untill you find the one your thinking of,
A dream is just a dream until YOU make it come true.


© Copyright 2000 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
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1 posted 2000-10-05 04:49 PM


I like this, it's inspirational
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2 posted 2000-10-05 05:21 PM


That's good, short n sweet      
Bel

sweetstuff101
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3 posted 2000-10-05 07:35 PM


Great work, sweet and simple, I like it. Nice job, keep writing!!

Luv,
SweetStuff


~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~


Caz
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4 posted 2000-10-05 08:47 PM


Great poem, great poem. I'll print this and put it where everyone can see it. Really good thoughts.

It's been raining since you left me.

Fearless_Angel
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5 posted 2000-10-05 09:01 PM


Hey Branden:
    I really like this poem. It's short but has great meaning to it. Keep up the great work okies?
                    Lotsa Love,
                             Angel (^_~)

[This message has been edited by Fearless_Angel (edited 10-05-2000).]

Jenn Cirrincione
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6 posted 2000-10-05 09:30 PM


This one's sweet. Nice job. It's a happy one!
Jenn

"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

Erin
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7 posted 2000-10-05 10:04 PM


I liked this one...Very different and creative...Keep it up!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Pixie-Babe03
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8 posted 2000-10-06 04:19 PM


this is so cute! i love it!!
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9 posted 2000-10-06 04:51 PM


great poem and i hope to read more.
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10 posted 2000-10-09 09:08 PM


Thos three lines do mean a lot.  What a way to express thought.  Very impressive.  keep writing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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11 posted 2000-10-10 02:31 PM


It's good...and very true. Good job!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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12 posted 2000-10-11 11:21 AM


short and sweet. I like this. whoever you wrote this about must be very special to you. I wish I had someone who wrote poems to me. Oh well, bye. Love ya, Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

branden726
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13 posted 2000-10-11 04:44 PM


Wow i didnt think this would get so many replys thank you all so very much and this poem does mean a lot in a couple different ways...Thank you all...again lol peace
                  Branden

"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

Monica Ash
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14 posted 2000-10-11 06:35 PM


  Wow this was a really really good poem it is all true!!!!! Check out my 2 new poems Loving Willy and Remembering the night we ment and tell me what you think please!!!!
              Monica

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