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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Hush now Don't you cry See there Those two little butterflies How they dancs on the wind Free of worry and pain Not like moths Who are drawn to the flame So he hurt you Broke your heart Swore to you You'd never part Then turned his back And just walked away Forgetting all those promises He carelessly made I am here I'll keep you warm I'll keep you safe Safe from harm I won't be like him And speak empty words in your ear I'll only promise I'll always be near So fly on the wings Of those butterflies I'll dry every tear Though thousands you may cry And even though What I offer's not much I'll hold you close You're safe now, hush. Th.A.P. I guess I would have to say that I wish I could do this for every girl that has ever been hurt by any guy. Dry all their tears and be the strength,security, and support they need. But I never will, as much as I wish I could. But to all of those girls, remember, there are good guys out there that will hold you when you need to be held, as a friend, nothing more. "I'll hold you close. You're safe now,hush" Thomas A. Plemmons Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thomas~ < !signature-->What a wonderful poem. I too wish that you could take every tear from every girl's eye who has been hurt by a guy. I wish more than anything that you could take away all the tears from my eyes from my dad and Everything that has happened. I wish you could take away all the pain-filled nights of crying myself to sleep. So you see, when you say every girl who's ever been hurt buy a guy, I thank you for understanding and being such a great person. Please continue to post as much as possible, I truly do admire your work.  Luv2LuvYa! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ p.s. you better get your butt in gear and read my latest...hehe  luv ya man,~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~ [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 10-05-2000).] |
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Man With A Revolver New Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 7Netherlands |
Great poetry Thomas.. beautiful words.. and I can relate to your message very strongly.. It's so painful to see someone cry Somehow their sorrow becomes mine It's the hurt of seeing beauty die I'll comfort until all is fine if you don't mind, i do have a small point of critique however, on the structure that is. The first stanza has a few points of influency. I would enjoy it more when these were resolved. Still, very sweet poem.. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thomas~ This is so amazing...I dont know where you get it from...You wrote this so beautiful... So he hurt you Broke your heart Swore to you You'd never part Then turned his back And just walked away Forgetting all those promises He carelessly made Keep it up my friend...Btw that was a really good part...My favorite!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Tom.....will you be my imaginary friend Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like the feeling you put into this, it's awesome. The ending of it just seems perfect: And even though What I offer's not much I'll hold you close You're safe now, hush. |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
good poem it goes together great |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful sentiments Thomas ... and very nicely composed. Such genuine sweet and tender thoughts from a caring heart ... uplifting to read! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Great poem man, really excellent. This poem says many thing that I feel for some friends, but the way you said it was just excellent. I wish we could do everything you say for girls, good poem. Thanks, bye. It's been raining since you left me. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This is great. There need to be more men around that feel like that. The sentiment was sweet. Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that is so sweet!!!!! I luved that poem soooo sooo much!! That was awesome!!! Great job, keep writing!!! Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey* This was absolutly wonderful. I think everygrl out there wishes that you could dry all our tears. you say for us to remember that there are good guys out there who will just hold us, but just because they're out there doesnt mean they are the easiest to find Keep up the great work, and check your email!!~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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