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Here I Am |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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Here I Am There she is...again. Noscelantly, unaware... stabbing me...again. There she is...of course. Engaged, expecting... not with me...of course. As she sits...right there... beautifully, musically playing my heart...from right there. I've had no dillusions of ever being free. I know that once in awhile she'll be this close to me. She holds these dillusions that the wound has healed...no scar. Here I am...again, bleeding from afar. Jeremy D. Halstead 10~3~00 |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"As she sits...right there... beautifully, musically playing my heart...from right there." "She holds these dillusions that the wound has healed...no scar. Here I am...again, bleeding from afar." Standing, clapping ... with much applause Jeremy! Truly a wonderful piece of writing here. Great imagery you used to capture such raw emotions. Excellent!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's either I haven't been paying attention, or is it that I haven't seen you around in a while? Well, it's nice to read your work again. As expected, based on your talent, it's a wonderful piece again. "I've had no dillusions of ever being free. I know that once in awhile she'll be this close to me." BRAVO!!! I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jeremy~It is wonderful to see you still posting...And posting such beautiful work!!!Thanks for sharing this piece with us...Keep it up my friend!!!  ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
As Always a beautiful post Jer! I thought that this one was absolutely magnificent. You are so talented and I am green with envy...ok not that envious. Anyways, I think that there are some things that you are not telling me? what is going on here...? I think you need to call me. Oh, and hey what was up with you calling me that one morning at 5 letting it ring once and then hanging up? I was a little confused. But don't worry I'm not angry hehehe Nice poem dewd! You are the best.Luv2LuvYa Love always ~*~Jess Girl~*~ ~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey babe OH how i love your poems as always. You have a true talent, one that sometimes I wish I had. And thanks so much for lending an ear the other night it meant alot. and as i write this im praying that i have the right Jeremy lol im pretty sure I do, but if i dont excuse all that up there Im sorry. well neways keep writing cause i love your work.love always ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Well Jeremy, I know exactly who you are speaking of in this piece. And I know that as hard and just so wrong as it may seem, you've got to get over this. Your kind of like in a racoon trap(if you don't know I'll explain later.) Just let go before you start knawing your arm off. I'm here for ya man even though I have no time between two jobs now, I will make time for my brothers. I luv ya man, keep up the good fight and you will conquer the day. later!! jason  I'm not concieted...I'm convinced. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem has a power behind it, your words are amazing. I second everyone else in declare your great talent. Awesome poem |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this poem tons. You DO have talent, I admire your work. Keep posting up bud. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Once again I feel like a no-talent hack. Your phrsiology and word usage is simply breath-taking. The picture you painted with your words is amazingly heartbreaking. Keep up the good work. Thomas |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Once again I feel like a no-talent hack. Your phrsiology and word usage is simply breath-taking. The picture you painted with your words is amazingly heartbreaking. Keep up the good work. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Grrr, you make me jealous! You're way too talented. Wow it's been a while since I've talked to you..okay so we never really talked...but replied...oh, you get the idea. I'm you're going through this  but keep smiling alright . Oh yeah, keep up this writing okay?? Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Fearless_Angel Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57Calgary, AB Canada |
Hey Jer: Wow! This poem really captured me. It's magnificent! You really have lots of talent. I feel pretty much the same way about someone and I totally understand your poem. It was very beautiful! Keep it up, okies? Peace! Lotsa Love, Angel |
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