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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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Choices~Haiku < !signature-->Throughout our lifetime, we make difficult choices, that decide our fate. ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 10-02-2000).] |
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
CHOICE WORDS OF WISDOM LIKE SWEET MUSIC TO THE EAR YOU WILL REMEMBER COOL HAIKU. TRUTHFUL |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Shadydaze~ Thanks for the reply...I like what you had to say...Why not post it up??? ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Hi Erin! You've got the perfect 5-7-5 syllable down in this ... well done! Love to see people trying new things (check your e-mail) ... Great work! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Kit~Thank you for taking the time out to read this one...I really appreciate it... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Erin, you're really good at these  You're great at expressing deep thoughts in a short form, I love the poem |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Lakewalker~I dont think Im good yet...I still have alot more to learn...But thanks for the compliment!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Don't know what else to say besides "I LOVED IT!!" Keep it up JiGgLeR!Love Always JeLLo ~*~Everyone hears what you say. Friends listen to what you say. Best friends listen to what you don't say.~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jello~ Girl you are a doll!!!Who could not love you!?!?Thanks for the reply... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
that was very well balanced and neat to read. reminds me of childs days and elementry school, thanks for the memories! love, jeremy r "I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering, I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection." ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It just so amazing that such little words put together makes a type of sense that actually carries thruout a persons entire life. great job weirdo  Psycho  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jeremy & Psycho (my little friend also known as Acire)...Thank you both for the replies I really appreciate them!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Your words are so very true, Erin. Well written haiku, they're fun, aren't they?  *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Alwye~ Thanks for reading this and replying to it...They are fun...I like writing them now... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This was well done and your syllable count is great but I have to be the one who is the downer here. True hiaku always have a nature theme which carries a deeper undertone of life. What you have here is beautiful and you should continue to broaden your horizons. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks Marilyn...Kit told me about that... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi erin, i just read this in the digital passions and i am here to say that i really liked this a lot and i hope to see more of your haiku/senryu, being a japanese poetry lover myself... and oh, merry xmas! |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I haven't read too many hikus (I can't even spell it!!) But you have written well I like it!! Well done!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Kaile & Melster~ Thank you both very much for your replies. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice on here......so tru.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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