Teen Poetry #3 |
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Sparkles |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair ![]() |
Those lonely dark skies are filled with sparkles of light They capture my thoughts, and remind me of you at night Standing beautiful, mysterious, and glowing in a special way Just the sight of you always seems to help pass the day With these stars, I hope and wish you know how I feel Deep inside these feelings stir and show they’re real You’ve crossed my mind many times, leaving paths I’ll never get over that special way that you laugh I wave, say hello, and adore everything about you In a confused state, I don’t know what to think or do I melt when you smile, your eyes seem so bright Without you, there is nothing special about this night "I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering, I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection." ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I loved how you tied this into the night sky, it's written very well. This poem is awesome jeremy! |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
hey jeremy this is really amazing and heartfelt..i absolutely love it...the words you use just come out at me.. HUT TWO THREE FOUR! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! the clowns on parade the clowns mascerade rip off your face rip off your brain the clowns on parade -me |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
hmmm, this is very good...I also like how you tied it in, very good... **life is like an ice cream...the trick is not to get brain freeze **I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away** ~Robbie Williams~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jeremy~ This is really good...I really like how you used the stars as an example...A beautiful piece...And very sweet too!!!Its good to see you posting more work...I havent seen you lately...Keep it up buddy!!! It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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