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House of Horrors (PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE REPLY?!!!!) |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
Welcome!Welcome!Come on in!!!!! the naive have arrived, prepare the dinner! enter the house, with a grin the lions head is staring through your eyes... Bloody veins lie ripped open in the walls ghostly fetus are walking around.. mothers with ripped open stomachs are screaming about. this old lion will give you the knowledge of the rat.. never thought you'd see this eh?(cencorship is not family) WHO SAiD THAT??..feed them to the politicians! give them all "clean" morals and give them one old god Little girls are sprouting out of the walls ...when they should be on the street.. sell yourself for a nickle.. this lion is gonna taste new meat.. Dinner is ready!!!!!! the revolution is being served on platters (dead and gone already eh?) we do more work and get nothing in return.. read me read me read me read me liar liar liar liar the lion has died!!!! the naive now have eyes... and as for you... Welcome to the House of Horrors.< !signature--> I am buried up to my neck in Contradictionary flies I take pride as the kind of illiterature I'm very ape and very nice -Kurt Cobain [This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 10-01-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Holy moly...this was INCREDIBLE! ghostly fetus are walking around.. mothers with ripped open stomachs are screaming about. such words, such words....this was again, incredible...there's nothing else i can say, really.... ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
this poem rocked anomaly. I loved the whole thing and the last line perfected and finished it all so well. GREAT JOB!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow...............just wow. This is great, powerful writing, keep it up. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
it sucks when you have to bump your own poem despite the fact that I have been leaving feedback on other people's poems whenever i can and especially on the weekends(no bull****ting dope heh)...so one question..did Acire's post really do anything???...please just leave some feedback...you really don't know how much i would appreciate it...i have only had one poem to go pretty high(although i posted on it to) and that only went up to 8...i am whining now but i don't care... I am buried up to my neck in Contradictionary flies I take pride as the kind of illiterature I'm very ape and very nice -Kurt Cobain [This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 10-01-2000).] |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Okay, I guess there is a reply problem on the site...but I guess everyone's gonna have to notice that. This poem is really really powerful, I think it may be a little over my head, but that doesn't matter. I don't think I could have ever come up with something like this...it's really good...keep it up okay? Hasta luego Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
BUMP!!!!!!!!!! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! the clowns on parade the clowns mascerade rip off your face rip off your brain the clowns on parade -me |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Okay... I'm not going to be all "incredible work.." obviously you have talent, and the idea behind this poem is good, but oh my God! That was the most disgusting mental picture! It was entirely negative, I don't want to censor you or anything of the sort, I'm just giving my opinion. I don't know what else to say! Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
well jenn it has a lot to do with society..so why should i be positive?..some teenagers happen to be negative...and i'm not offended by what you say but i am giving my opinion..i live in lower-classdom and trust me society isn't good to you unless you're rich..this poem doesn't happen to be alot about that but other things that plague society..so open your eyes.< !signature--> HUT TWO THREE FOUR! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! the clowns on parade the clowns mascerade rip off your face rip off your brain the clowns on parade -me [This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 10-01-2000).] |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
From one clearly disturbed individual to another...Whoa...nice, thanks for the trip... BTW, this has certain songish qualities...um... In-yelling-hurray-for-mental-disruption THERE IS NO SPOON Spreading insanity, one post at a time "Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven" |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I in no way wished to offend you... so I'm glad you weren't. But you act as if I know nothing of what is hard.... I am not rich. Who said I know what it would be like to be in uppercrest society? I sure didn't. I feel my eyes are open... I would just prefer to look at all sides of this world... not just the dank, terrible aspects of it. There is such a thing as balance. But like I said before... it's obvious from the way you write you do have a talent, and I think one day you could go somewhere in your work, if you haven't already. I was just telling you how I felt in general about this piece, in general, it was eerie. Sorry if I've upset you; Jenn< !signature--> "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 10-02-2000).] |
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
maybe you shoulda posted this strange work of dimentia on dark passions. WICKED! |
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