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Do you love me?
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Do you love me? |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI 
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Do you love me? I cannot tell, The way you look at me, It gives me the chills, I've watched you watching me, You gave me the look, The look of love. How come everytime im in love, You come back and do nothing but haunt, I lost you a year ago to another guy, What do you want now? Your the one who left me in the cold, You are the one who broke this heart of gold, I need to make this loud and clear, I dont want you or your dumb love! I have the girl of my dreams, She is way better then you, All you are to me is NOTHING, I hate you but yet you say you still love me, I dont believe you, Your the girl I almost took my own life for, What now? I answere the question on whether you love me or not, The answer is no, Your friend told me you only wanted to get me in bed, "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
*gives you the "look of love"* I LOVE YOU LOL!!!! hahaha you rock my world! do you ahev ICQ we should chat! ~*Justine*~ |
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poe_32 Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 179Winnipeg, MB, Canada |
This poem is really good. You explain your feelings about this girl well, she doesn't deserve you nore did she ever deserve you. And it's good that you found the right one for you. Keep writing. smiles  poe  Life isn't about holding grudges or starting fights life is meant to be enjoyed |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Again, I love the style Great job telling of this situation! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
wow you really know how to give it raw! that's awesome! keep up the good poetry! Curlz "i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky" enrique iglesias |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Wow I dont know what to say...I just never really (honestly) heard of a girl trying to sweet talk her way in the bed with a guy...But anyways thanks for sharing this... It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey thanks for everyone who replyed it was really kind of you all i hope i do the same for you "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Brandon, this was a great piece. Written simply yet the message was out there and well taken. I think this girl is rotten, but who knows. I only have your poem to make a judgement, so yea.....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Yet again a job well done! She doesn't deserve the time of day!!! |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
lol where are u guys finding these lmao okay thanks for the reply......i guess lol thanks again "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
great consciousness of your surroundings and how they affect your life, nice poem here jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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