Teen Poetry #3 |
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I'll weave my magic just for thee.. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA ![]() |
I'll weave my magic just for thee Spell binding your heart so you can just only see Of what you have done and how you have hurt me Maybe this will finally open up your eyes Instead of having your head stuck in your lies You're tongue only speaks in riddles to my heart Ripping and tearing it apart And your eyes give way to your soul There I always seem to find the demons that you hold So why must you lie And play me for a fool When I obvisiously love and cherish you Your gentle words were once my salvation And now they bring my world to total devastation But I'll let go, I'll move on My soul will wake up and face the dawn But what about yours? Where does your fate lay? Perhaps in the words you regret to say? Go on, leave my world For your heart never longed for such a different girl It is true I'm not like the rest Concieted you might say, but I admit I was a test Perhaps to let you know, that in the end you're just like the rest So pack your heart along with your soul And run into that oblivion you long to know Also, a little secret before you go You're not really that hard to let go.. "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Holy this poem kicked serious butt. I can relate to it so well. The last line is obviously something that would be hard for me to do, but it'd be great as a little witty insult and last line for the poem like you did. This was amazing. I liked it a lot. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Ok...If this is for me...well, it really hurts...but I guess I'd deserve it in some odd way that I'm not aware of. If it's not....well that's good. Either way, it's a masterful piece of art and probably the best of your's I've read. Jeremy Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
You never cease to amaze me. The way you write is so poetically correct. From the wording to the ryhme scheme. Loved it. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
I can't think of anything to say, I'm speechless. That was so good! Well, whoever this is about(and uhh I'm confused on that one) I guess you've gotten over this person huh? Well, good luck to you, keep it up Hasta luego Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
what an awesome piece of literature! you exhibit powerful inspiration and great natural talent. your poetry is quickly becoming a fave for me. let him take his heart and go his loss here soon he'll surely know let him take his soul and leave for the winding web to which he cleaves He'll not forget the life you shared nor forget a single care FOR THE SPELL YOU CAST ON HE [This message has been edited by shadydaze (edited 10-05-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I love your style, this poem is great ![]() |
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