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If I Could!!!
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If I Could!!! |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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I guess this has been boiling inside for quite some time now and it needs to come out of me. I'm going to write this as I type, so don't expect all that much...totaly free verse...thanx *(as I pound on the keyboard with every letter it type)*. Once again, I bury my face into my own trembling hands. As they slide angrily through my hair, I open my eyes. As I spew frustration silenty, I crash those hands upon my face again. Without encouragement or ado to myself, I try be fooled....by myself. I bellow out another phrase... perfect tonality...perfect range... perfect something...perfect sound. This I try to achieve in one last desperate whale. Of coure....utter failure. I've had this dream...or dillusion it's called. Singing. Told am I that talent springs about me... but where is it at?! I've heard me!!! I have but mere scrap compared to he!!! Who is he, you ask!!! He is... He is... He is...that one.. that one who even bares not a flaw within his throat Try not...strain not. The continual dissapointment of endless vocal inferiority is an unheard or inconvenience this being. I have this ambition...this effort that I'de like to put forth. If only I had the goods to back it up!!!! These goods, those goods, all of the damn goods he posseses!!! Does the make life of what I would. No. Jeremy D. Halstead 9-23-00 Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow Jeremy ... well, you sure put your thoughts down powerfully. Great emotion in this piece ... I liked it! Some of my favorite singers don't have "operetic" qualities when holding a tune ... they have instead, a uniqueness that pulls you in, and endears you to their music ... sometimes a gravelly voice, sometimes a boyish voice, sometimes a perky or even haunting voice ... well, you know what I mean. Each one sings exceptionally to these ears, and none are perfect, but that's precisely why they are so popular!  Keep going for your dreams Jeremy ... you'll make it ... just have faith in "you"!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jeremy~~~You sound angry...Why???Well if I could I would help you but I havent seen you on in ages...So next time you get on hit me up and we could talk ok??? Good way to get out your feelings...Its better this way then to keep it inside... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
JEremy, Found it!. You're not inferior! Stop putting me on an unattainable pedestal. Your singing is great. Stop putting yourself down. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Well, I must say Jeremy, sorry it took so long for me to find it! My bad! < !signature--> Anyways, I must agree with that boy above me whom you envy so much that you are almost green. JEREMY~you have a wonderful voice and you are NOT inferior. Stop being so self conscious. I know how you feel, but little buddy, listen to lil Jess Girl when I say, you have a wonderful voice and have the ability to go far with it, have a little faith in yourself...ok? Well I have to go tend to my own inferiority complexes right now, take care....Love Always ~*~Jess~*~ ~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~ [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-28-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Jeremy, long time no see my friend. you have no need to pound your keyboard so. those damn goods are yours for the taking. "all we are is what we're told, and most of that's been lies." have the faith to disbelieve. prove 'em wrong. That's the sound of a bottle when it's hollow;when you swallow it all wallow and drown in your sorrow and you're probably gonna do it again tomorrow |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is great writing, you should be posting more again! |
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