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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
I can ruin your dream Just by a snap with my finger I can play with your life So that you are the victim I can burn your tears And drown you within I can be your supervisor And make you sweat I can tell a lot of lies And make you believe them I can walk through your body And make you feel sick I can be who I want to be Just by clicking my tongue I can choose who I want to know And you're not one of them ok, this is definitely a really bad poem, but it just had to get out again... I'm in a realy weird situation at the mo...so.... luvz, VS Experience of survival is the key To the Gravity of Love ~*~Enigma~*~ |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Bad poem my @$$! The vindictive harshness and raw display of the power within is conveyed with every line. Great job! I'm liking your work more and more. Thomas A. Plemmons Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
eya! thanks !! glad you like 'em! yeah, they're just what I'm thinking at the mo... hehe, like you can tell, I was kinda angry at the time I wrote this...  luvz, VS Experience of survival is the key To the Gravity of Love ~*~Enigma~*~ |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem because it was like....uh....i dont know the words....like....cynical or something. I'm not sure how to describe it, but anywayz i thought it kickedbutt  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
but it just had to get out again~That is what you said...And thats exactly what you are doing...Expressing yourself in a good way...I like this on along with all of your work...You have talent...Dont put yourself down... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
eyaz! thnx again!!! luvz, VS Experience of survival is the key To the Gravity of Love ~*~Enigma~*~ |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Hey, your poems are just great, and this isn't an exception. You have a gift explaining your feelings in your poems, that's the hardest thing for me. So, anyway, f you want to talk about anything, I'm very good at listening, and it might sound weird 'cause you don't even know me, but I would love to help you out. It's been raining since you left me. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Do I need to kick your butt!?! Girl don't sell yourself short!You write better poems than I could ever imagine writing. So keep it up cuz I love to read 'em. And as for the emotion in the poem...I felt it very well. Thats a talent you have, I admire it. < !signature-->Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~ [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-23-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
hey, don't intro your work as being bad! it makes other people not want to read it. and this is a work that deserves much attention. great message of empowerment. Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
aawww...thank you all!! you're just so sweet to me... luvz, VS!  Experience of survival is the key To the Gravity of Love ~*~Enigma~*~ |
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