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Jack In a Box |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Jack in a Box: Cringing buzzes cause my ears to bleed peach nectar. Drinking poisonous venom is all that seems to put me to sleep In my home near the highway. I accidentally spilled a glass of love on the carpet. I don't think my quilted picker uppers or sets of vacumes Can get the stain out. I lost the bottom of my heart in some super market about one year ago. Maybe it's in the lost and found, but I'm too tired to find my keys. Maybe they are there too. I don't think I even have a car. My pace-maker is running slower than normal, If only I could crank it up like my jack in the box. Me and jack are too busy though. We lost janet and her box. But in loosing, I seem to gain life; And that's all that matters.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
As always...loved it... ~Carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I accidentally spilled a glass of love on the carpet." "I lost the bottom of my heart in some super market about one year ago." Excellent Javier! Loved the imagery in this poem, really well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Impressive. Very descriptive and original tale of love lost. If not for it's depth it would almost seem cosmetic in each line, until you see the story behind all the catch phrasiology. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yes well thanks for the compliments on this poem. Like Kit, I also like the spilling the glass of love line. hehehe ok bye! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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