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curlygurly
Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 276
USA

0 posted 2000-09-19 08:28 PM

Will you be the one for me
The one I can hold so easily
Can you fill my heart with passion
Or dissolve like today's fashion

Can you be the one I trust
Like metal that won't rust
Will you be good to my heart
In the end and from the start

All the guys in the past
They didn't exactly last
Will you be different them all
Will you catch me when I fall

Tell me now before it's too late
Hurry! Hurry! Don't make me wait
I need to know if you're the one
Before I can have any fun

hope you enjpy my poem, tell me what you think!

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

1 posted 2000-09-19 08:34 PM

Okay chica, it's a great poem, I was expecting the snowy owl one

not a luv one. Don't worry, we'll get ya a good one! He's out there......somewhere. Maybe somewhere near here...hmmmmm..... Alright well keep posting......
Bel

Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2000-09-20 03:09 PM

I thought the poem was cute. Especially the HURRY HURRY part.....keep it up

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

3 posted 2000-09-21 12:24 PM

Girl theirs no need to be in a rush...But its ok too!!!I mean I wish I could have met my boyfriend a long time ago...But anyways...One day love is gonna find you...And when that day comes you are gonna know...Just dont look to hard for it...It may just pass you up...

This was a really good piece...I hope to see more!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2000-10-03 04:56 PM

The feelings of wanting.

I agree with Erin though, there is no need to hurry. When you take time, it becomes more meaningful. Great writing...keep it up.

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

5 posted 2000-10-04 02:30 PM

I think the others already gave the advice, so I'll just say Awesome poem!!!

I liked it a lot, it expresses your feeling well.

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