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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 2000-09-18 08:49 PM




It is here, cannot escape it
But no longer can I take it
Left and right, side by side
Many I have known have died

I have no problem meeting others
And as we speak as sisters, brothers
Death comes, every time it seems
Stealing them, pulling me to my knees

I cry out, in pain and fear
But my God is no longer near
In anger, tears roll down my cheeks
I know it won't help, and yet I weep

I begin a search, to find myself
Out slip emotions stored up on the shelf
With battles raging in my mind
No answers to my questions I find

How much more can I take of this?
The fear, the pain, the angered bliss?
And then, a thought my brain does send
I could make this pain end

It wouldn't be that hard, I say
I wouldn't have to face the day
It would be painless, quick
Then everything would be fixed.

I'm sure I will be missed by none
For by all I have been shunned
Don't you get it? Don't you see?
I have no choice but to flee

I try to sprint across the street
The hood of a car my body meets
There goes my world, it looks so black
All senses except thought I lack

This can't be real, oh no, I cry
But hadn't it been my wish to die?
No, not like this, not this way
Is not there something I can say?

My body is placed onto a stretcher
My mother's voice whispers, "God spare her..."
Oh please Mommy, stop your tears
Daddy, take away her fears!

And as I toy with consciousness,
Prayers to God I do confess
"I'm sorry, Lord, forgive me please.
I need Your love, Your grace, mercy."

Please, God give me another chance
I have yet to kiss, to dance!
For once in my life, please make this right
I really don't want to die tonight

Not that sheet! No, no over my head!
This is so wrong, I can't be dead
What about my family, friends?
What will they do if I meet my end?

Suddenly something lights up the room
It is so bright...a being I assume
The light somewhat fades, showing the face
Of an angel who is to take me from that place.

She scoops me up in her loving arms
We fly o'er large cities, farms
She drops me off at a towering gate;
The place where I am to meet my fate

Out walks St.Peter, scroll in hand
He takes a glance at the scroll, then says, so grand
"Child, your time has not yet come.
You must return back to your home."

At that very moment I see a flash
I can feel my flesh, bones wrench and crash
Then all the pain comes to a halt
My body: no longer locked in a vault!

I open my eyes and look around
In my own room, in my bed safe and sound!
After all that, just a crazy dream
Yet how real all of it seemed....


Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

© Copyright 2000 Carly Anne Van Dort - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-09-18 09:14 PM


I am pleased with this poem. At first it was just cliché, but then the ending had a twist. I have seen too many poems in which some girl or guy gets hit by a car, dies, and then just wishes to go back but doesn't. bla bla bla, but yours was a crazy DREAM it SEEMED. I liked the whole thing. Good work mamasita!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Erin
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2 posted 2000-09-19 09:28 AM


This was long but it was worth every extra minute I spent reading it...I am so amazed with this...Keep up the good work...Good to hear that this was just a dream...

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-10-15 04:36 PM


Sorry I didn't respond until now , but this is great.  I wasn't expecting to hear that this was a dream.  Great job writing this one!  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Child of the Stars
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4 posted 2000-10-15 05:38 PM



  Thankies everybody!!! Stay sweet ya'll.hehe...

    ~Carly

"I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper.

IsGona
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5 posted 2000-10-16 08:27 PM


You are very good writter.  I loved this poem.  I kinda agree w/ dopey, so I'm  very glad I read the thing to the end.  

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~
"I am, who I am
and what you think,
I don't give a damn"
Chilli Peppers


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