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its long but read the whole thing!! another no-namer
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its long but read the whole thing!! another no-namer |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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It is here, cannot escape it But no longer can I take it Left and right, side by side Many I have known have died I have no problem meeting others And as we speak as sisters, brothers Death comes, every time it seems Stealing them, pulling me to my knees I cry out, in pain and fear But my God is no longer near In anger, tears roll down my cheeks I know it won't help, and yet I weep I begin a search, to find myself Out slip emotions stored up on the shelf With battles raging in my mind No answers to my questions I find How much more can I take of this? The fear, the pain, the angered bliss? And then, a thought my brain does send I could make this pain end It wouldn't be that hard, I say I wouldn't have to face the day It would be painless, quick Then everything would be fixed. I'm sure I will be missed by none For by all I have been shunned Don't you get it? Don't you see? I have no choice but to flee I try to sprint across the street The hood of a car my body meets There goes my world, it looks so black All senses except thought I lack This can't be real, oh no, I cry But hadn't it been my wish to die? No, not like this, not this way Is not there something I can say? My body is placed onto a stretcher My mother's voice whispers, "God spare her..." Oh please Mommy, stop your tears Daddy, take away her fears! And as I toy with consciousness, Prayers to God I do confess "I'm sorry, Lord, forgive me please. I need Your love, Your grace, mercy." Please, God give me another chance I have yet to kiss, to dance! For once in my life, please make this right I really don't want to die tonight Not that sheet! No, no over my head! This is so wrong, I can't be dead What about my family, friends? What will they do if I meet my end? Suddenly something lights up the room It is so bright...a being I assume The light somewhat fades, showing the face Of an angel who is to take me from that place. She scoops me up in her loving arms We fly o'er large cities, farms She drops me off at a towering gate; The place where I am to meet my fate Out walks St.Peter, scroll in hand He takes a glance at the scroll, then says, so grand "Child, your time has not yet come. You must return back to your home." At that very moment I see a flash I can feel my flesh, bones wrench and crash Then all the pain comes to a halt My body: no longer locked in a vault! I open my eyes and look around In my own room, in my bed safe and sound! After all that, just a crazy dream Yet how real all of it seemed.... Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I am pleased with this poem. At first it was just cliché, but then the ending had a twist. I have seen too many poems in which some girl or guy gets hit by a car, dies, and then just wishes to go back but doesn't. bla bla bla, but yours was a crazy DREAM it SEEMED. I liked the whole thing. Good work mamasita!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This was long but it was worth every extra minute I spent reading it...I am so amazed with this...Keep up the good work...Good to hear that this was just a dream... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Sorry I didn't respond until now  , but this is great. I wasn't expecting to hear that this was a dream. Great job writing this one! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thankies everybody!!! Stay sweet ya'll.hehe... ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
You are very good writter. I loved this poem. I kinda agree w/ dopey, so I'm very glad I read the thing to the end. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN" ~Hatebreed~ "I am, who I am and what you think, I don't give a damn" Chilli Peppers |
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