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Why Must You Fall?
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Why Must You Fall? |
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FlipAngel Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46Prior Lake, MN, USA |
Tears, oh tears why do you fall surely you know you're not welcome Damn you Oh dreadful tears why must you fall And sting thy tender cheek? Oh you wretched tears to thy lips must you go? How bitter is your loathing taste as it makes its travels into thy fragile heart But tears oh tears if to thy cheek, and to thy lips, and to thy heart must you go please grant me this one wish... revive my weary soul. ~*Yesterday is gone, let go of the past; tommorrow will bring new hope to grasp*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Looks like you are writing in Elizabethan. I liked it. I liked the "oh tears"....i loved that part. I just liked the poem in general. good work!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nice FlipAngel, I enjoyed the flow and wording in this piece. Great work!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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