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Teen Poetry #3

Make Me Smile

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

0 posted 2000-09-15 05:38 PM

I have never ever had the guts
To tell you how I feel,
'cuz I didn't want people to know
and make it a big deal.

I have watched you from up close
And also from afar
Although you did not know it
You were my hero and my star.

I don't know what more to tell you
Or anything else to say,
But I know for sure that
We'd be together some day

So now you know my secret
I've been hiding for a while,
That it was you and only you
Who could always make me smile.

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

1 posted 2000-09-15 05:58 PM

Sugarpie~~~This is such good work!!!I like it...Its very intresting...I thought it would have ended different but I was wrong...

P.S.~~~Welcome to Passions!!!

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2000-09-16 02:33 AM

Yea i liked the poem too. LIke erin i thought it was gonna end differently, but it's cool the way it is. Kept me on my toez.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2000-09-16 08:15 AM

You have a very nice rhythm and flow to your work SugarPie! I enjoyed these thoughts ... keep up the great work!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

4 posted 2000-09-17 05:01 PM

Val~ *hehe* hey! this is Sara... this is such a cute poem!! keep up the good work and check out some of mine too

see ya in STUDY HALL!
-=Laterz=-
Sara

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

5 posted 2000-09-18 01:02 PM

Oh, I thought this was so sweet

Very well written too! Great job on this poem, I love it.

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