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Allysa

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since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2000-09-15 03:27 PM

I asked God for an angel,
and what he sent was you.
I didn't see how a person,
would know just what to do.
I asked God if he knew,
and he said that yes he did.
I didn't used to talk to him,
sometimes I just hid.
I asked God if you were,
the angel sent to help me.
He said don't worry so much,
just let everything be.
I asked God to help me,
to live my life like this.
And everything changed the moment,
you gave me that first kiss.
I asked God what he wanted,
and if this was so true,
if he was mad because of what you did,
I didn't know what to do.
But then I learned not all angles,
really do have wings.
And to appericiate life,
and all the finer things.
God sent me an angel,
and that angel was you.
But now I am all alone,
and there's nothing I can do.
All I know is that,
I feel quite alone.
And one day I might see you,
and you will take me home.

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This is definatly for Justin. Or possibly for Tommy, if he doesn't ingnore me.

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

1 posted 2000-09-15 06:05 PM

God sent me an angel,
and that angel was you.

What a choice of words!!!Beautiful work...If this is about Justin I am sorry...Hes not worth your time if he wont even talk to you...

Keep up the good work girl!!!

~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~

anomaly187
Member

since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

2 posted 2000-09-15 08:38 PM

i agree!.beautiful work...i liked the repetition in the beginning...and writing from the soul is always great..

Now night arrives with her purple legions
Retire now to your tents & to your dreams
Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth
I want to be ready. - JM

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

3 posted 2000-09-18 08:27 AM

Thanks for replying. It's for Justin. I don't mind waiting for him, atleast not very much, because he is worth it. Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2000-10-18 08:17 PM

Seems like you're a little confused. Who is this really for? Is it Justin's or Tommy's?

You know, you have really amazed me with your style of writing. Awesome work.

"But then I learned not all angels,
really do have wings.
And to appericiate life,
and all the finer things."

Simply beautiful

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2000-10-18 08:25 PM

Well whats up? Anyway good poem......hope to see you around more often.
I don't see hardly anybody on teen poetry anymore, i think they've all left or something.
Eneh weh.........hope to see you soon!

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

6 posted 2000-10-18 08:31 PM

Hey. This was really, really great. I loved it. God's so cool..hehe... well, happy writing...

~Carly

"I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2000-10-19 02:16 PM

Hey! Great poem, it was beautifully written!!
"I asked God to help me,
to live my life like this.
And everything changed the moment,
you gave me that first kiss."

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

8 posted 2000-10-19 05:02 PM

This is a really well done poem

"I asked God if you were,
the angel sent to help me.
He said don't worry so much,
just let everything be."

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

9 posted 2000-10-19 05:09 PM

Extremely nice poem, but I would have to say that you should dedicate it to the one that is worth it. If the other guy doesn't even pay attention, then to h@#$ with him, Know what I mean? Keoni

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

10 posted 2000-10-23 08:21 AM

I'm glad ya all liked this. I decided it's for Justin, and he is talking to me now.

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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