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Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2000-09-10 05:55 PM

You seep into my brain like a poison
consuming my inner most thoughts
leaving me thinking of nothign but you
and what we had
MY life was pure bliss for some time
you made me feel worthwhile and i loved you
you stole my heart like a bloodsucking theif
and you burrowed into my soul like a disgusting critter
You deplete my whole existance
and you crushed me like an ant
when you kissed her
you were suposed to be mine
we belonged to each other
i was completely yours
and you trampled me like a doormat
like i was nothign more then a convience
for 2 years
together we built a wonderful love
i thought would always last
but you threw everyhting we had away
and blamed it on me
no my body is decaying
and i cant sleep
i dont eat
im falling apart
and im dead inside
all because of you
and your one little kiss

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

anomaly187
Member

since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

1 posted 2000-09-10 08:39 PM

well it's a great poem Jenabou and it flows nicely..i especially liked the end..you wrap it up nicely...and if this was written from experience i sincerely hope you get through the ordeal..just know that you are better than him.

Now night arrives with her purple legions
Retire now to your tents & to your dreams
Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth
I want to be ready. - JM

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

2 posted 2000-09-10 09:18 PM

thank you so much
this is from experience and i havent gotten thru it yet
but im trying

Love Ya Bunches
~Jen~

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2000-09-10 10:07 PM

The poem was so good!!!!! I loved the title cuz it fits so well. The writing flowed perfectly. I am going through this exact situation except its back and forth like a sea-saw of hell. I am telling you, you brought it out perfectly. I hope you get out of your odeal faster than mine. My relationship lasted for 2yrs aswell. That's why it's weird to read this. very well written, congrats. POST MORE!!!!!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

4 posted 2000-09-11 12:27 PM

WOW Jen this is great...I thought it was gonna be a different type of poem from the title but I thought wrong...Keep up the good work!!!I cant wait to see more!!!

~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

5 posted 2000-09-12 08:58 PM

Thank you all very much
it's easy to pack emotions into a poem when your feeling very emotional
thanks for responding

Love Ya Bunches
~Jen~

Ender
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since 1999-12-08

Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA

6 posted 2000-09-13 02:11 AM

what a great poem. you made the words work so well with each other. KUDOS! I look forward to more poems from you.

*Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender*

Virgin Suïcide
Member

since 2000-08-11

Posts 319
Netherlands

7 posted 2000-09-13 05:43 AM

hey! great poem Jen!! sorry it happened to ya...

"im falling apart
and im dead inside
all because of you
and your one little kiss"

definitely my fav part!!

luv yaz and keep it up!!!
Virgin Suïcide

I dream about how it's gonna end
Approaching me quickly
Living a life of fear
I only want my mind to be clear...
~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

8 posted 2000-09-13 04:24 PM

thanks guys
its very hard place to be in
but im hanging in there

Love Ya Bunches
~Jen~

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The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

[This message has been edited by Jenabou (edited 09-13-2000).]

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