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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Hidden You walked through the valley of hidden trees Gracing through shadows soft as the breeze; Your dance charmed the creatures and pleased the man, Hold out your hand and allow the dove to land, It wishes to know from where it came Except you and the dove, the world is to blame. A rainbow falls from a cloud through the sky A voice bellowed from above saying she will die He had sent her so i had no control I just wished she didn't have to go I could only watch when she fell to the ground. She then departed and I heard a voice soft in tone Before me I saw the tree for a moment Then what i couldn't see was gone ---Written by:Hoppy 11-27-99 There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
Another great piece from you. thanks for shareing i loved it. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
This poem is very good. If i'm right, you're writing about someone that is afraid of the world and basicly everything, so they hide from it all. Sometimes i feel like that and you just want to stay hidden from everything, or runnaway from all your problems. I really enjoyed reading this and look forward to reading more from you. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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