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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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This poem is a poem. It was written on paper. Paper comes from a tree. Trees are cut down to make paper. Cutting down trees is ok as long as we plant more. The amazon has a lot of trees. We cut amazon trees down. We don't replant trees. Cutting down trees is bad. Writing on paper is bad. This poem is still a poem. OK! so here it goes!! Gates: Born under a lily, But raised under the rose. My thoughts are confinded, And my mind enclosed. Like the raging hell Burning to escape The love and kindness We are raised to hate. Frozen over with passion With nothing to imply. Melting away nature. How de we get by? Born under a lily, But raised under a rose. Open the gates of fate, And see what they show.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
hey, it is definately still a poem..there is nothing i can critisize about it either...i really just love it...oh and did you write this as a 9th grader? (i think you were the one who said that you were posting previous written poems) Now night arrives with her purple legions Retire now to your tents & to your dreams Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth I want to be ready. - JM |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK let me explain this in the most elaborate way possible. ALL of the poems I have posted from the first one till present have been from the 3RD BATCH. The 3rd batch were my very first few poems. It was named the 3rd batch because i had 2 different thought waves within it and 1+2=3.......1st plus second...i didnt do it.....one thought wave plus one thought wave....i have no idea WHY! haha....anyway....these were my firsts cracks at poetry writing. To get an idea of it all here we go: 3RD BATCH (55 pieces)= 1998 second semester of 9th and summer going into 10th. 4TH WAVE (61 pieces)= 10th grade entirely 5TH CYCLE (47 pieces)= 11th grade first semester and part of second. Ending in April. 6TH ROUND (so far i have 78 pieces)= Starts in May of 2000 onto present day. This current one I am working on has the most because i am going through tons of crap right now. Along with those 4 dif. categories i have 2 more: 1. In the beginning- lost poems i found from my beginning of the 3rd batch that I didnt add. 2. The Lost Foundation- poems I wrote in 7th grade that sucked so much i never took the time to type into the comp. I recently put them all together and now i have them. So there you go. So yes, all these poems you have seen and will continue to see will only be my 9th grade self....I am just trying to take it by stages. I have gotten better with time and more mature. I just want to portray this within the forum. LIke, show it to the world. So yea, glad you liked the poem! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Dopey, I liked this one. I especially liked the intro. heh..you've got so much talent; I will use it as an inspiration for my own life. thank you for being. ~carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Dopey~ < !signature-->An inspirational poem in which I have found much pleasure reading. Born under a lily, But raised under the rose. My thoughts are confinded, And my mind enclosed. I absolutely loved that stanza!! Keep 'em coming, I can't wait to read more!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~  If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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