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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
You broke You hurt You tease and please me You act You play You say it's a game You pretend You ignore You decline even more You stop You quit You hate all this s.h.i.t You don't know You don't care You don't see what is there The hurt The pain The joy you gain You see It's me You say Please stay You go and leave You stay and I believe That you are true That you can do Can be Can see Can feel for me I hope You know I hope You care And you Will see That you need me hmz...just kinda tripped... hope you like 'm!! it's just a poem... love, Virgin Suïcide...  "I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..." Love is hard to live... Try to live life in love.... [This message has been edited by Virgin Suïcide (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
I'm a little too old for the forum..but oncein a while I like to come in here and read what our future poets have to say. Yours really got to me...I'm going through the same thing. It's funny how you don't need many words to understand the lyrics of love. I guess what I'm trying to say is that I loved your poem very much.  miriam coronado |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
hey thank you a lot!!! it really means a lot to me when ppl like my poems and stuff... thnx for reading it! love, Virgin Suïcide... I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
that's what the forum is all about sweetheart...support and feedback. miriam miriam coronado |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Virgin~~~I like this...Its different...I like the way you formatted this one!!!Keep up the good work!!! ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Wow. This is different. I never could wwrite poems like that. I love this loads. It applys to me too. Well, bye for now. Much love, Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
hehe, it's funnny that everyone keeps saying it's diferent....ok, I know it is...but I kinda like this way of writing...short, but yet powerful I guess.... thanks for replying!! love,Virgin Suïcide... I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey! This was awesome. And I'm not gonna tell you its different seeing as you already know. Sometimes the shortest poems send out the greatest message and are the most powerful. This was great keep up the great work!! ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow... powerful. Short, but it worked. Luv the quote by the way... Silverchair's new CD rocks. Jenn |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
jupjup! it really does!!! love, Virgin Suïcide... I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I am so sorry Virgin...I just noticed that I posted a poem with the same title as you... ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Nice style, I like it a lot, other than here, I've only seen it in the adult forum. The poem is really well writen,you're good at this. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The title is simple just like the poem. Simplicity, in this poem, shined. I liked it. Bye!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
ERIN: it's ok!!  Jose Marti: Thank you!! Dopey_Dope: Glad you liked it!! love, Virgin Suïcide... < !signature--> I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ [This message has been edited by Virgin Suïcide (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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Lurdburger Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 39Carlisle, Cumbria, England |
I liked your poem a lot, it was beautiful |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Virgin Suicide~ < !signature-->Your words were so powerful! I love how in poetry, you don't have to use a lot of words to get your point across well. It may be different, but different is good and deserves praise. I much liked this one! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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