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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I think that the title is right, but I'm not sure, this is one of those rare times when my English fails me. I dedicate this to salooma, and Isabell Galaxia, who might know how I feel ESTRANGED I have gown my whol life here in America state to state… Never really knowing the land land of my tropical roots, the clear beaches. El coco y el mamey son, rumba salsa, y guaguanco long lines of people and constrictive laws, limiting my political freedom, and a little mayombe Yet state to state, In this frozen land of the North, from the oaks and the maples hip-hop and the techno, McDonalds, and 7-11 constrictive laws limiting my culture. My soul returns to the island of it's past to swim through the reefs and dance the dance as if it had never left. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Well I cant say I know what you mean cuz I dont...I grew up in America and have never been out of the country...But I have friends that have grown up in their own country then came here...This was a good way to show how you feel...Keep up the good work... ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
As usual A wonderful poem my friend! < !signature-->I don't exactly know what you mean, But you described it well. I'm just a little ignorant. LoL  Keep it up you're great!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~  If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Jose, eres cubano o Boricua? I'm confused because you talk about fidel y todo eso , tambien hablas de "la patria o la muerte" and that being the communist slogan. Asi que, im confused. Which isla are you talkin about? Anyway, it must suck immensely to be stripped away from your island and stuck in between your internal hispanic culture and this feeling of being imposed upon americanization and all this racism and stereotypical judgement. Stay strong bud.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I can't say I know how this feels because I don't, but from my point of view this poem tells your feelings very well. I love how you mix languages here, it just seems, I don't know, unique and cool. I think this is awesome, incredible writing here, it really seems like it's from your heart. "My soul returns to the island of it's past to swim through the reefs and dance the dance as if it had never left." |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
thanxs guys for responding. about how I feel, Dopey pretty much hit it on the nose. Erin, Jes~ tahks for responding Dopey~ soy cubano, I might have confused you by telling you that i used to live in San Juan. I was born in Havana, in La Vivora distrct. Our two island are pretty similar culturally. Perhaps you recall a line from that famous poem:"Cuba y Puerto Rico son, de pajaro, las dos halas." the only line that might have given it away here is "costictive laws, limiting my political freedom" Also, yes it does suck to stuck between my culture, and this one. The only time that I really feel American is when i go to cuba Lakewalker~ thank you for liking my style, about that last stanza, I was afraid that It wouln't make sense |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I was really hopingthatone of the dedicatees would read this at some point. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Jose- !Muy bien! I've never really thought of America as "frozen land of the North," but I guess compared to Cuba it is. Thank you for dedicating it(in part) to me, that's very sweet. I can understand where you are coming from on this one. But I have never been to Cuba, so I don't know exactly what it's like there. And like I've said before, I like to remain a mystery so I won't give myself away too much.  Great poem my friend, I can't think of too much else to tell you.....so keep writing ok? Hasta luegoBel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
~Isabel~ I didn't mean for you to miss cuba, I meant for you to miss your own home country. Where are you from? do you ever long for "the old coutry" |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
A very good subject. A very open idea. I look forward to more poems from you. Keep up the good work. *Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender* |
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