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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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This is my little kiddie poem, i call it that cuz i can picture it on a childrens book with a picture of a shadow and like, some Kindergarden teacher reading it to the class. Anyway, don't be fooled by the "kiddie poem" description. The poem is deep. UHhhhh...... you should be able to grasp the concept, if not......ask me. Shadow: My shadow is my only friend With his dark form of being. He floats through the light of day To find his true meaning. Even though he's mute and deaf I love him just the same. He's the only trustworthy guy I know And Shadow is his name.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very well done Dopey! I enjoyed the sentiments in this ... sometimes we can trust only in ourselves. I enjoyed this very much. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks kit, you seem to respond to a lot of my poems. I like that. Anyway, you're the only one up till now. Oh well. |
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HaVoK Junior Member
since 2000-09-06
Posts 31DETROIT, MI |
Definitely NOT a kiddie poem... Little kids would just start yelling "I HAVE A SHADOW.."...and "I GOTTA PEE".. lol |
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HaVoK Junior Member
since 2000-09-06
Posts 31DETROIT, MI |
Definitely NOT a kiddie poem... Little kids would just start yelling "I HAVE A SHADOW.."...and "I GOTTA PEE".. lol... I liked it.. It makes you think.. |
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MoonPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 29Wisconsin, USA |
How exactly is this a kiddie poem??? I don't see a child understanding this at all... You again have a good poem, and I agree that sometimes all you can do is trust yourself... Keep up the good work... Love, MoonPrincess "Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Dopey~~~This is really good!!!A different kind of poem...I look forward to reading more of your "kiddie poems"!!! ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
this may not be a "kiddie poem" but i can totally imagine a little kid reciting this...even if he might not understand...well great poem as are all the ones i have read. "Serve the servants- oh no. That legendary divorce is such a bore" "i'm on warm milk and laxatives/cherry-flavored antacids" |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Dopey.... A nice take on the subject and a nice reult... well written stuff... regards, sudhir |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Yes Dopey, a wonderful poem!! I agree, it's not a kiddie poem, but I see what you mean in calling it that. Your work is excellent I do enjoy reading. Keep it up! can't wait for more! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~< !signature--> ~*~  If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. ~*~[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hi yes well thanks to all of you. I so appreciate the compliments. The reason why i said it was a kiddie poem was because even though a kid would never comprehend it, it just sounds cute. LIke a little story piece. Ok so yea thanks! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey dopey I think this really is a kiddie poem, this kiddie enjoyed it more than you will ever know. Indeed, my shadow is the only one I can trust. ~carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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