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Saving To Die |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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OK yes well i posted this poem up in another forum about a week ago. I don't think this is against the forum regulation (to post up the same poem more than once for the whole membership time span). Anyway, here you go. Written in elizabethan and yea. Inspired by my Ex-girlfriend and a certain incident while she was my gf (please no advice on anything, just read the poem and critic it). Hahaha so anyway Hope you likez. Saving To Die: Tis the hate O lord, that comsumes thy soul Tis the ignorance of thee that betrays human whole Tis the passion of thy heart that plunges thy mind Yet in thy heart love you'll soon find. O kinsman, O brother, your ways but amuse me O kinsman, O brother it is the heart that kills thee O kinsman, O brother , Your life is but a game. O kinsman, Or another, It will never be the same. O lord but thou hath no sense in reason Tis spring, time of love, not a time of treason. O lord if thou permit me, I must imply That this thief,raper, killer is but a fly Buzzing and bizzing among our food Trying to but make us have a bad mood. O kinsman, thou doth know logic of life I will abide to thee to with hold my death knife. Tis thee who hath love in this black hearted rat So tis thee who will die, how about that?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I havent received posts for this poem, dont let it slip by por favor. That would suck! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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MoonPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 29Wisconsin, USA |
Now, Dopey, do you think I would let this just slip by??? It's a wonderful poem, and nothing that I would've expected from you... (no offense, I promise you...) Very good job, and I won't give advice, cuz I know how you feel.... Love, MoonPrincess "Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Since I talk too much, I shall put my few cents in also. This was wonderful Dopey! I love the Elizabethan touch! It makes the poem so interesting. Keep it up!! and since I am posting a reply, you have a simple *bump* from me. < !signature--> Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-08-2000).] |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
I liked it  For when day turn to night I am still there The fallen angel jytree |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think out of all the replies I liked jytree's the most. So simple! hahahaha yes anyway thanks! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I love this...the wording choices are so deep, so thoughtful. Kudos to you, Dopey!! ~carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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