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The school hallway |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
When I saw you in the hallway I couldn't help but stare And when you smiled at me I could tell you really cared Then here you come Walking towards me I know you want to talk Or so thats what I thought In my head I'm thinking Whats he going to say Somthing nice? Or will I walk away with sadness Oh my stomach is turning I think its doing loopdy-loops So many thoughts of what to say And not enough time to turn away You say hi and ask me whats going on I turn bright red and say nothing at all You tell me you really like me And invite me to the mall Of course I'll go I say He just smiled and walked away I'm so glad I say him In the school hallway |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This would be a great addition for the book! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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ValerieB726 Junior Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 14Louisville,OH, USA |
Wonderfully written! I loved how it was in a place we can relate to. I felt it could happen to me because of the feeling it conveyed. P.S. could you please give replies to my 2 "Tears" and "I love you so much" They are my first real attempts at writing and i would like advice. Thanx. |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Well done Niki....beautiful one.. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
seems like i've read this one before from you in a way but i know its different and as always its great. i really love it. keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
Thanks everyone for your replies. And Valerie I'll reply to them as soon as I can. Jerhamia (misspelled) when are you going to e-mail me?? And my friend says thanks for the reply. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
How sweet. This is a beautiful poem! I love the way you verbalized your thoughts in such an organized manner. I have a problem with that I suppose. lol. Keep up the wonderful writing!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~< !signature--> ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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