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Now I Cry Alone
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Now I Cry Alone |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
All those lonely nights we spent together talking All those lonely nights we cried ourselves to bed We were both waiting for that day that each would go their own way We were both awaiting the day that we would part We were the greatest of friends We were the greatest of lovers We were the greatest story of love We soon were nothing but emptiness We both agreed that we would still love one another We both agreed to still cry together We both didn't agree on loving and leaving one another We both didn't agree to loose one another to that place we all call a love that never was We lost touch on one another We lost control on what we loved And to this day my heart is still frozen by your cold hearted touch |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Wow TruLUV...Such thoughts!!! We lost touch on one another We lost control on what we loved And to this day my heart is still frozen by your cold hearted touch Oh wow...This is the best part of the poem...I really like it...So much feeling in just this part of it...I dont know what else to say but wow!!!Keep up the good work... YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is such a good piece, but it's so sad. I hope this doesn't apply to you, but if it does, I hope writing this helped the pain. Keep up the great work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I like what Erin had to say about the thoughts put into this. The message was clear and dramatic in a meloncholy way...I loved it...keep it up. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
trueLUV*~ i am impressed! this is a very good poem and gives good insights into your thoughts!!! keep writing!!! ~*Pixie*~ |
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