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mr0001 Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 39 |
you say "i love you" and i say "i know" you say "and i'd stop the world for you" and i say "i know" you say "but i'm getting tired" and i say "i know" you say "and i don't know how much longer i can..." and i say "i know" so you say "good-bye" and i am left speechless. |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi mr001 Good one Sincerely A_L |
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mickel2995 Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 48 |
This one is a bit confusing, the relevance of loving one person and stopping the world for them is what to saying good bye? would you like to clarify for little me? Micale |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
I liked it a lot. The style was really neat. And, if you don't mind, Micale, I'm going to take a shot at explaining it. Sometimes one person feels like they're doing all the work and it can be hard on them, and even though the other person knows how they feel, they really don't know what to say about it. Then when that person finally does have enough and say goodbye the other person is left with nothing to say because they know they had a chance to stop them and didn't take it, once again they are left speechless. Did I come close? Great Poem  .~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood" |
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mr0001 Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 39 |
thanx for responding actually susie, you hit the nail right on the head!! sometimes we can love people but not ever tell them and they just get tired of being the only one talking and they feel like the only one in love...and i know that the poem was a little confusing, micale, but so is love  "crazy" is just who you are...amplified. some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color. |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
I like it a lot. And you are right mr, love is confusing. But ya know what, if it wasn't it'd be boring!  ) You have a great way of writing poetry. I really like all of your work. Keep it up!~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear mister, now THIS i like!! *waa haa haa* i may be wrong, but this is absolute poetic genius... flow, rhythm, story line... and so concise... major kudos to you, boy-o... and keep it up... i'm off to read more of your stuff... hope this brilliance wasn't just a one-time thing... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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