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Dreams of Love |
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Moon_Hunter New Member
since 2000-09-04
Posts 7 |
This poem is about a girl I wanted to date named Lindsay. I gave her this poem on the day I graduated, though nothing happened. She never even said a single thing about it. Well here it is. She Her voice Her laughter Like a romantic song Playing in the evening night The smile upon her face More beautiful than the stars Radiant Perfect Her eyes Like Cupid's arrow Has pierced my heart Has pierced my soul Like a summer's night dream She has entered my mind And danced her way into my heart |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Welcome to passions!!!I hope that you enjoy it here as much as I do!!! The poem is really good...I cant wait to see more of your work...So about this girl...How does it make you feel that she didnt say anything???Why dont you give her a call???She sounds like she was really special to you!!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us and please keep in mind that we are very supportive of each other. The pleasure you receive from reading comments on your work is the same pleasure others need by receiving your comments on theirs. This is a rule that all poets here follow. We invite you to join the family! This is a wonderful first post! The flow is just lovely, and your sentiments so tender and beautiful. I hope you're able to connect with her along the way. I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a beautiful and heart-felt piece. I would melt in a guy's arms if he gave this to me. If she read this and didn't feel anything, well, she doesn't deserve you. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions This is a great entrance into the teen forum, it's a wonderful poem. Thanks for the chance to read it, I can't wait to see more! |
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Moon_Hunter New Member
since 2000-09-04
Posts 7 |
Thanks |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
welcome to passions!!! short and sweet. That girl probably ended up speechless. It's either that or she ain't got no heart. They don't realize how hard it is for us guys to do even simple things like that for a girl. I'd love to read more of your work. As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
What a great addition to our little family!  Welcome!! You are very talented, and your work is excellent! This poem was great! I can't wait for more! Keep 'em coming! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~ |
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MoonPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 29Wisconsin, USA |
Such a good first post... I'm sorry that you didn't hear anything, but if it makes you feel better, I loved this poem, and would've said something had it been meant for me... Wonderful job, and keep up the good work... ~Kristi "Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear." |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
i like your poem a whole lot... lots of emotion. and she said nothing? if someone gave me a poem like that i can imagine being speechless but no reaction?? thats just screwed up welcome shira |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
Hello and welcome to passions. I think yuor poem is very good and i really enjoyed it. Thankx for sharing it and I hope to read more. Keep up the great work. Lovely_Kris |
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