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Burst of Reality
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Burst of Reality |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
**Something I done for English last year. My body is a haunted castle Where the wind howls it's grief Through untouched hollow expanses Of space. Restless spirits loiter All driving fear to lost wanderers Like a violent burst of reality. Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs Several forms scurry to seek shelter Beneath her levitating shadow. Her back rigid , eyes glassy Gazes intently at time escaping Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles Through the hour glass, A single tear grazes her misty cheek. Floating on the turrets is Dreamer She is the wind's slave Skimming the cracked stone sky eye Her watery opaque eyes innocent She captures the trees' whispers And the sky's tears Blows warmth into frozen wishes Flings them into the air. Racing around the first floor is Livid Rage burns her soul She attacks anything her eyes catch Screaming, tearing furniture to shreds. Sometimes she lays her hot cheek To the window, eyes roving, desperate Along the carpet of woodland and fields Choking on her own resentment Hopelessly blind to the shredded curtain Hanging, fluttering and flawless on the window. Striding down the halls is Adamant The air about her is clear, sharp as ice, Lacy frost climb up walls As she passes. Views formed by shrewd alertness Are immobile, as craters on the moon. Her glue for this Great Power Lies in injustice and pain. Melting in the main chamber is Amiable She radiates warmth, her tongue is caramel. Striving to fill the black void with comfort Fades to a sheath of shimmering light As gales thrust spears of ice Through her vulnerability. Eyes glistening with laughter Her lingering, delicate laugh Never cracks. I am Poignant, the lookout, The outcast. I hold the heavy truth, Of reality. Circling this treacherous site Warding of disruptive beings, I sense the bitter taste the fear, Of merging together. They shy from each others presence In case of creating the burst of rare moonlight Melting, vanishing as day breaks. "You could be my unintended Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse "Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith "Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs Several forms scurry to seek shelter Beneath her levitating shadow. Her back rigid , eyes glassy Gazes intently at time escaping Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles Through the hour glass, A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You really put your heart into this one!! So what did your teacher think? Did you get an A? |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great poem. you better have gotten an A or i'll have to have a little talk with that teacher. LOL I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Thanks for replying Poet de Vine and Jeremiah...yeah I got an A*...as if I'm going to get that in the exam (MY EXAMS FINISH TOMORROW HURRAHHHHH!!!) |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful and powerful piece. Good luck on your exams!  "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oh wow.....this is extremely powerful, with such rich imagery...you have phenomenal talent and you certainly deserved that A!  *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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