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Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
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0 posted 2000-06-21 05:18 PM



**Something I done for English last year.

My body is a haunted castle
Where the wind howls it's grief
Through untouched hollow expanses
Of space.
Restless spirits loiter
All driving fear to lost wanderers
Like a violent burst of reality.

Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive
She sits, cross legged in a midst  dark cobwebs
Several forms scurry to seek shelter
Beneath her levitating shadow.
Her back rigid , eyes glassy
Gazes intently at time escaping
Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles
Through the hour glass,
A single tear grazes her misty cheek.

Floating on the turrets is Dreamer
She is the wind's slave
Skimming the cracked stone sky eye
Her watery opaque eyes innocent
She captures the trees' whispers
And the sky's tears
Blows warmth into frozen wishes
Flings them into the air.

Racing around the first floor is Livid
Rage burns her soul
She attacks anything her eyes catch
Screaming, tearing furniture to shreds.
Sometimes she lays her hot cheek
To the window, eyes roving, desperate
Along the carpet of woodland and fields
Choking on her own resentment
Hopelessly  blind to the shredded curtain
Hanging, fluttering and flawless on the window.

Striding down the halls is Adamant
The air about her is clear, sharp as ice,
Lacy frost climb up walls
As she passes.
Views formed by shrewd alertness
Are immobile, as craters on the moon.
Her glue for this Great Power
Lies in injustice and pain.

Melting in the main chamber is Amiable
She radiates warmth, her tongue is caramel.
Striving to fill the black void with comfort
Fades to a sheath of shimmering light
As gales thrust spears of ice
Through her vulnerability.
Eyes glistening with laughter
Her lingering, delicate laugh
Never cracks.

I am Poignant, the lookout,
The outcast.
I hold the heavy truth,
Of reality.
Circling this treacherous site
Warding of disruptive beings,
I sense the bitter taste the fear,
Of merging together.
They  shy from each others presence
In case of creating the burst of rare moonlight
Melting, vanishing as day  breaks.

"You could be my unintended
Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse

"Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith

"Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive
She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs
Several forms scurry to seek shelter
Beneath her levitating shadow.
Her back rigid , eyes glassy
Gazes intently at time escaping
Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles
Through the hour glass,
A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani

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Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-06-21 08:43 PM


You really put your heart into this one!! So what did your teacher think? Did you get an A?
Jeremiah Johnson
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2 posted 2000-06-22 01:43 AM


great poem. you better have gotten an A or i'll have to have a little talk with that teacher. LOL

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
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3 posted 2000-06-22 01:19 PM


Thanks for replying Poet de Vine and Jeremiah...yeah I got an A*...as if I'm going to get that in the exam (MY EXAMS FINISH TOMORROW HURRAHHHHH!!!)

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4 posted 2000-06-22 02:22 PM


This is a beautiful and powerful piece. Good luck on your exams!  

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Alwye
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5 posted 2000-06-23 01:20 AM


Oh wow.....this is extremely powerful, with such rich imagery...you have phenomenal talent and you certainly deserved that A!  

*Krista Knutson*

"Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~


"We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~

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6 posted 2007-11-18 09:47 AM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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