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Lone Insomniac Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45 |
this is one of my old poems, but also one of my favorites... Burning tears Help me, I need you I don't know what to do I don't know which way to flee Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity You say you don't love me Only I feel what love can be Look in the mirror, I can see Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity If I could ease the pain No thanks, see it again and again My heart stopped following me Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity Ashes to ashes I can't live on Waiting for the path to walk along Dust to dust, shadows of my tree Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity One by one they keep falling My love for her keeps calling In my ocean of misery Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity Feeling like I'm between heaven and hell In a place where's nothing left to tell Just feeling my wandering love deathly Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity No peace of mind, screaming all day I can't feel anything anyway Entombed by my only pain, lovely Burning tears have scarred my face for eternity I will wait, there is nothing else to do Blind, looking for someone who's true Hope I'll find her, truly and deeply Burning tears have scarred my LIFE for eternity |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
beautiful poem i love your style i could really feel the emotion in it well done Love Ya Bunches ~Jen~  The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Great poem, very impressive. That's an old poem? Wow how long have you been writing? Great, keep it up Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Dear God, do you have any idea how awesome this is?!? I must say you've taken my breath away. Rock and roll, my friend! *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I am not worthy I am not worthy (faithlessly chanting) hehehe you are awesome!!!! damn I'm speechless (trust me that's hard to master!) Keep it up!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~ |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
This was a really good poem. It sounded like you were really in love. I don't have the talent to write somthing like that. When I write, I get strait to the point, but you...I don't know. I'm really REALLY enjoying your poetry. By the way, check your e-mail...I wrote you. ~Guys are like stars, there are millions of them, but only one can make you dreams come true~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nicely penned LoneInsomniac! I can see why this is one of your favorites ... I think it's one of mine now too! The repetitive ending line to each verse re-inforced your sentiments, and the twist to it at the end was powerfully poignant. Really well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Great poem! It is very strong and moving! Keep up the good work!!! Luv ~*Pixie*~ |
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